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Character: Garlyn_Johnson

Origin: Los Angeles, California - USA 

Story:

 

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Garlyn Myler Johnson is one of two children, with a father named Kent Johnson and a mother named Sarah Veronica. Garlyn was born on September 30, 1999, he was often called Myler in his family but besides that he was often called by his friend Myler, and is now better known as Myler. he lives in a well-off family, Garlyn's father himself has a business that is a shop in the Las Venturas area, when Garlyn goes to school, he often help his father to work in the shop if he didn't study yet. Even though his mother only takes care of the house or can be called a housewife, but in his spare time his mother often takes care of the shop. Brother Garlyn himself is a man named Jayden Sherlock, with a difference in age of 5 years with his brother.

 

      Over time, Garlyn grew older. He is often taught to do business, work hard and never give up by his father. His father had the ambition to succeed his children in the future and moreover his father owned a small shop business that would be continued by his children. At one point, something that Garlyn and her family never wanted to happen happened, namely Garlyn's father had died due to severe pain. At that time Garlyn and her sister and mother were confused because they did not know what her father's inheritance store had to do because Garlyn and her sister did not really understand about business.

 

      Garlyn also runs the store business inherited from his father, passed day by day to carry out the mandate of his father. One day his mother died of a heart attack, and shortly after this, his father's store went bankrupt because many rivals continued to emerge. This makes the economy very devastated, Garlyn and her sister plan to try their luck in the city of Los Santos, Garlyn applied for a job where it was not accepted, finally to support her sister and herself, she became a cruel criminal to date. Garlyn has a dream someday she can become a mafia and be respected by everyone ..

 

 

 

 

 

Saya $MyBebs_™ selaku pemilik account UCP BayMEX bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Garlyn_Johnson) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain.

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To Mr/Ms Garlyn Johnson,

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to PENDING your request.

Reasoning for said denial is listed below:
  1. Your grammer kinda wrong "when Garlyn is on school or there is no work he often helps his father take care of the shop."
    It's be like "... when Garlyn goes to school, he often help his father to work in the shop if he didn't study yet.."
  2. Fix all the mess on your Character Story once again, keep it up.

I wish you the best of luck in the future.

Sincerely,

Administrator Level 1 powerfull,
Jogjagamers Roleplay Administrative Team.



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4 hours ago, Powerfulll said:

 

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To Mr/Ms Garlyn Johnson,

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to PENDING your request.

Reasoning for said denial is listed below:
  1. Your grammer kinda wrong "when Garlyn is on school or there is no work he often helps his father take care of the shop."
    It's be like "... when Garlyn goes to school, he often help his father to work in the shop if he didn't study yet.."
  2. Fix all the mess on your Character Story once again, keep it up.

I wish you the best of luck in the future.

Sincerely,

Administrator Level 1 powerfull,
Jogjagamers Roleplay Administrative Team.



Edited @Powerfulll tolong di cek kembali. 

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On 2/13/2019 at 4:50 PM, $MyBebs_™ said:

she often likes to stop by her father's shop and help her can help.. Whereas her mother only takes care of the house or can be called a housewife, but in her spare time her mother also often helps to take care of the shop.

Salah, kok jadi 'she' dan 'her'? Kan karakter kamu cowo, seharusnya pakai 'he' n 'his'...

 

Dan juga, perbaiki grammer seperti dibawah ini:

 It's be like "... when Garlyn goes to school, he often help his father to work in the shop if he didn't study yet.."

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On 2/15/2019 at 5:37 PM, Powerfulll said:

Salah, kok jadi 'she' dan 'her'? Kan karakter kamu cowo, seharusnya pakai 'he' n 'his'...

 

Dan juga, perbaiki grammer seperti dibawah ini:

 It's be like "... when Garlyn goes to school, he often help his father to work in the shop if he didn't study yet.."

Done. @Powerfulll 😅

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On 2/13/2019 at 4:50 PM, $MyBebs_™ said:

the shop is quite crowded with visitors, when Garlyn is off school or there is no job, he often stopped by his father's shop and helped him.

salah grammer nya, ikutin kek punya gue aja yang diatas.

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To Mr/Ms Garlyn Johnson,

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to APPROVE your request. And, your character story will be moved and activated immidiately in  24 hours, if in 24 hours you still cannot access paycheck feature, please do contact one of JG:RP Staff in the game for further action.

Sincerely,

Administrator Level 1 powerfull,
Jogjagamers Roleplay Administrative Team.

 

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