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Character: Dylan_Wade

Story:

 

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Dylan Wade was a businessman son, he and his family became broke after the incident that made his family store burnt out in the mid of riot year. Several months have passed after the incident, his family economic status finally became stable as usual. But unfortunately, his family wasn't very lucky at all because of the inability to adapt with the upcoming ages and since then they became broke again.

 

After that, they decided to discontinue their business and let Dylan helped his family by working in a low-mid salary job at a restaurant which he had worked for several years, but that was not a lifestyle Dylan wish to live. Suddenly Dylan decided to build a new life in Los Santos. He got his passport, ticket and papers handled by his generous friend, the ticket was supposed to be his friend's brother possession but his brother was dead two weeks before the planned schedule, so his friend decided to give the ticket to Dylan. Dylan was very glad.

 

One week before the schedule, Dylan promised to his mom. He promised to solve all of the economic failure of his family. Unfortunately, things became far from his expectation, his dream on living a prosperous life in Los Santos were all just bullshit, he keeps struggling to find a job, he can't even pay his own rent debt in time and he could not left Los Santos when his family in the pit of poorness, his plan to support his family in Los Santos was nothing but bullshit and a severe regret for his mental status, it was all because he forced to fly to Los Santos without a plan. A day before the flight, his friend who gave him the ticket, dead. Dylan went to the hospital where his friend was dead but he could not attend where his friend was buried.

 

 

 

Saya kuda_cina selaku pemilik account UCP kuda_cina bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Dylan_Wade) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain.

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Mohon maaf nih, kalau memang ada yang salah bisa dijelaskan bagian mana yang menurut mas admin salah, daripada disuruh stop pakai bahasa indonesia saja, kalimat mana yang ngga termasuk dalam standar grammar yang benar, Nuhun kang ?

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Saya sebenarnya hanya cuman meluruskan bahwa memang tertera di rules boleh menggunakan bahasa Inggris, asalkan "grammarnya benar". Menurut saya tidak apa-apa menggunakan Google Translate, asalkan cuman sedikit. Jadi tolong orang yang gak bersangkutan tidak usah ikut campur, trims.

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2 hours ago, kuda_cina said:

Tidak.

Mohon maaf moderator, anda kenapa bisa berasumsi saya pakai google translate? apakah ada grammar dan tenses mana yang menurut agan salah agar saya benarkan.

Trims Wassalamualaikum Warahmatullahi Wabarakatuh

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Mas, saya temannya si thread starter ini, maaf nih mas saya juga gamau ikut campur kayak gini, cuma ke trigger aja dengan asumsi mas moderator yang sampe nyuruh "Confess" "Ngaku" hanya dengan nuduh kalau si ts pakai translate yang ngga anda jelaskan dimana kesalahannya dan belum tentu benar, kalau memang menurut anda ini translate mohon dijelaskan bagian mana yang menurut anda salah grammarnya?

Di rules udah jelas boleh menggunakan bahasa inggris, tapi agan bersikeras buat nyuruh buat ulang pake bahasa indonesia, kalo emang ada salah ya di revisi atuh dimana kesalahannya. Di rules udah jelas kok mas kalau pemakaian bahasa inggris itu diperbolehkan asal grammarnya benar. Saya cuma mau dengar jawaban mas moderator ini ngejawab pertanyaan si TS, bagian mana yang menurut mas moderator yang grammarnya ga sesuai? Biar saya bisa belajar juga dari kesalahan CSnya si TS, trims.

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To @kuda_cina

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to APPROVE your request. Please read the following guide to activate your link your store to your In-Game account:

 


Sincerely,

Rishad_McCortez
JG:RP Staff Team.

 
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