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Tobby_William

 

 

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          One day in Mexico a child named Tobby William was born in a wealthy family, Tobby's father was a very rich businessman in his city and his mother was a doctor at a famous hospital. When Tobby was born his father was very happy and moved by his first child who had been born perfectly, one week after Tobby's birth his father also threw a party at the hotel to celebrate the birth of his son. The party that Tobby's father made was so luxurious that he invited famous singers, it was so crowded that the parking lot could not fit to accommodate the many cars that came.

 

          6 years later, Tobby's mother was pregnant with a 5 month old child. When Tobby entered elementary school he received news that his mother had given birth to a beautiful daughter and his father named her Alika Emillia. Tobby was very happy to have a little sister and loved her so much that he made a promise will protect his beloved sister.

 

          As time went on they grew up, at that time Tobby's father's company was in trouble because his employees were getting careless. His father's company went bankrupt because of the mistakes of his employees who were very careless, and Tobby's mother had already retired because she was getting old. At that time Tobby's father asked his wife for a divorce because of declining economic problems, Tobby's father decided to migrate to Los Santos which is located in San Andreas with Alika, and Tobby lives in Mexico with his mother. Tobby was very sad because he was separated from his beloved sister and he could not leave her mother just like that.

 

          Tobby was looking for a job to survive with his mother, but no company would accept him, and the next day Tobby contacted his friends who already had jobs. Finally one of his old friends was looking for employees for his company, his friend invited Tobby to join in his company and Tobby also works there. Every time he comes home from work, Tobby likes to bring his mother's favorite food and he lives happily with his mother. One night Tobby can't sleep because he remembers past memories with his sister, the next day Tobby gets news from his father that his sister Alika had been shot by a gun and taken to the hospital. Tobby was very upset to hear the news, and he immediately rushed to the city of Los Santos with his mother to check on his sister's condition.

 

          When Tobby arrived at the hospital, it turned out that his sister had reportedly died a few hours ago before Tobby arrived at the hospital. Tobby was very sad and angry because he could not keep his promise to protect his sister, Tobby did not accept his sister's death and wanted revenge on the person who had killed him. He will stay in Los Santos until he finds out who killed his sister.

 

 

 

Questions

Character Story Pertama: Yes

Durasi bermain di JG:RP: 1 - 3 bulan

URL Namechange:

 

Account UCP yang saya miliki:
bakil

 

Account Forum yang saya miliki: @bakil

 

 

Saya bakil selaku pemilik account UCP bakil bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Tobby_William) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain.

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memperbaiki tanda baca dan kapital
daigoardan53 Forumer

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Sebelum melanjutkan revisi, mohon dijawab pertanyaan di bawah ini:

  1. Apakah ini adalah pertama kali kamu membuat Character Story ? (Ya/Tidak)
  2. Sudah berapa lama kamu main JG:RP? ( Kurang dari 1 bulan / 1 - 3 bulan / 4 - 6 bulan / 6 bulan - 1 tahun / 1 tahun lebih / 3 tahun lebih / 5 tahun lebih )
  3. Apakah character ini baru kamu buat atau baru melakukan prosess Namechange ? (Buat baru/Namechange)
  4. Apakah kamu memiliki account UCP selain yang kamu mainkan saat ini? (Ya/Tidak)
  5. Apakah kamu memiliki account Forum selain yang kamu pakai saat ini? (Ya/Tidak)
  6. Dimana tempat kamu bermain sekarang? (Di rumah / Di warnet)

 

PENTING: Harap diperhatikan ketentuan dibawah ini!

  1. Menggunakan font yang mudah dibaca (Arial, Tahoma, atau Verdana). Font size: 14, dan jangan diberikan atribut berlebihan (Bold, Italic, atau Underline)
  2. Pastikan format penulisan Justify yaitu rata kanan-kiri menggunakan tombol image.png pada toolbar di atas.
  3. Tidak boleh ada plagiarisme! ( Silahkan cari di internet untuk plagiarism checker, contoh: https://smallseotools.com/plagiarism-checker/ )
  4. Ejaan, tanda baca, dan grammar harus sesuai dengan standar bahasa yang dipilih (Bahasa Indonesia atau English).
  5. Character story minimal harus memiliki 300 kata yang dipecah menjadi minimal 3 paragraph. 
  6. Gunakan huruf kapital sesuai penempatan kata dan juga yang baik dan benar.
  7. Untuk mengubah story / cerita character kamu, gunakan feature edit yang sudah disediakan:
    Spoiler

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8 hours ago, daigoardan53 said:

Sebelum melanjutkan revisi, mohon dijawab pertanyaan di bawah ini:

  1. Apakah ini adalah pertama kali kamu membuat Character Story ? (Ya/Tidak)
  2. Sudah berapa lama kamu main JG:RP? ( Kurang dari 1 bulan / 1 - 3 bulan / 4 - 6 bulan / 6 bulan - 1 tahun / 1 tahun lebih / 3 tahun lebih / 5 tahun lebih )
  3. Apakah character ini baru kamu buat atau baru melakukan prosess Namechange ? (Buat baru/Namechange)
  4. Apakah kamu memiliki account UCP selain yang kamu mainkan saat ini? (Ya/Tidak)
  5. Apakah kamu memiliki account Forum selain yang kamu pakai saat ini? (Ya/Tidak)
  6. Dimana tempat kamu bermain sekarang? (Di rumah / Di warnet)

 

PENTING: Harap diperhatikan ketentuan dibawah ini!

  1. Menggunakan font yang mudah dibaca (Arial, Tahoma, atau Verdana). Font size: 14, dan jangan diberikan atribut berlebihan (Bold, Italic, atau Underline)
  2. Pastikan format penulisan Justify yaitu rata kanan-kiri menggunakan tombol image.png pada toolbar di atas.
  3. Tidak boleh ada plagiarisme! ( Silahkan cari di internet untuk plagiarism checker, contoh: https://smallseotools.com/plagiarism-checker/ )
  4. Ejaan, tanda baca, dan grammar harus sesuai dengan standar bahasa yang dipilih (Bahasa Indonesia atau English).
  5. Character story minimal harus memiliki 300 kata yang dipecah menjadi minimal 3 paragraph. 
  6. Gunakan huruf kapital sesuai penempatan kata dan juga yang baik dan benar.
  7. Untuk mengubah story / cerita character kamu, gunakan feature edit yang sudah disediakan:
      Reveal hidden contents

    edit.png

     

 

1. tidak

2. 1-3 bulan

3. Namechange

4. Tidak

5. Tidak

6. di rumah

daigoardan53 Forumer

daigoardan53

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On 25/1/2023 at 23.13, bakil said:

          One day in Mexico[,] a child named Tobby William was born in a wealthy family, Tobby's father was a very rich businessman in his city and his mother was a doctor at a famous hospital[.] When Tobby was born[,] his father was very happy and moved by his first child who had been born perfectly, one week after Tobby's birth his father also threw a party at the hotel to celebrate the birth of his son[. The] party that Tobby's father made was so luxurious that he invited famous singers, it was so crowded that the parking lot could not fit to accommodate the many cars that came.

 

          6 years later, Tobby's mother was pregnant with a 5 month old child[. When] Tobby entered elementary school he received news that his mother had given birth to a beautiful daughter and his father named her Alika Emillia[.] Tobby was very happy to have a little sister and loved her so much that he made a promise will protect his beloved sister.

 

          As time went on they grew up, at that time Tobby's father's company was in trouble because his employees were getting careless[. His] father's company went bankrupt because of the mistakes of his employees who were very careless[,] and Tobby's mother had already retired because she was getting old[. At] that time Tobby's father asked his wife for a divorce because of declining economic problems, Tobby's father decided to migrate to Los Santos which is located in San Andreas with Alika[,] and Tobby lives in Mexico with his mother[.] Tobby was very sad because he was separated from his beloved sister and he could not leave her mother just like that.

 

          Tobby was looking for a job to survive with his mother, but no company would accept him[,] and the next day Tobby contacted his friends who already had jobs[. Finally] one of his old friends was looking for employees for his company, his friend invited Tobby to join in his company and Tobby also works there[. Every] time he comes home from work[,] Tobby likes to bring his mother's favorite food and he lives happily with his mother[. One] night Tobby can't sleep because he remembers past memories with his sister, the next day Tobby gets news from his father that his sister Alika had been shot by a gun and taken to the hospital[.] Tobby was very upset to hear the news[,] and he immediately rushed to the city of Los Santos with his mother to check on his sister's condition.

 

          When Tobby arrived at the hospital, it turned out that his sister had reportedly died a few hours ago before Tobby arrived at the hospital[.] Tobby was very sad and angry because he could not keep his promise to protect his sister, Tobby did not accept his sister's death and wanted revenge on the person who had killed him[. He] will stay in Los Santos until he finds out who killed his sister.

Lakukan perbaikan sesuai instruksi berikut:

  • Hapus tanda baca yang saya beri kurung siku berwarna merah.
  • Perbaiki tanda baca dan kapital yang saya beri kurung siku berwarna hitam.
  • On 25/1/2023 at 23.13, bakil said:

    Account UCP yang saya miliki:
    Tidak ada

     

    Account Forum yang saya miliki:

     

    Isi Account UCP nya dengan UCP yang kamu buat / gunakan
    Isi Account Forum dengan mentag akun forum yang kamu buat / gunakan (awali pengetikannya dengan tangan @)
daigoardan53 Forumer

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Character Story

Dear @bakil,

 

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to ACCEPT your request. Please read this guide to activate your character story In-Game via our UCP Website.

We hope that you may use this character story to further develop your character.

 

Sincerely,
@daigoardan53
JG:RP Helper Team

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