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Jontae Colleman


 

 

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     The birth of a young man named Jontae Colleman in 1999. who lives in a city in the United States has parents named Montay Colleman and his mother named Grace Aensley they come from a poor family, and both parents met Jontae. Jontae also dreamed of raising the degree of his parents from the mission. Several years passed, Jontae had grown up and where he had to go to school, Jontae's mother also registered Jontae to enter high school and there he had to study hard and he had to be able to change the fate of his parents because Jontae was the only child in his family and he had to to be the back of his parents.
 

     Jontae also attended school there and he had to interact with his classmates and not mess around, there he tried to make friends and communicate with his classmates but Jontae's classmates avoided or didn't want to be friends with him because he was a tall and black man. The next day, what Jontae didn't want happen, his classmate put the medicine in his bag, and his friend accused Jontae of carrying the item there. Jontae didn't admit that he brought it there. He fought and fought the teacher and he was expelled from the school. . Jontae came home from school and told his parents and his parents were disappointed.

     The next day Jontae entered a school that he considered mature for himself, there he tried not to mess up anymore because he had been ordered by his mother. His first day didn't go well because he had a scary face. In the middle of the semester, both of his parents died due to heart disease and lung disease, where Jontae was frustrated and there he was trying to find a bite of rice. The next day in his class came a new student named Joe. Joe and Jontae were close friends and good friends. Two days passed, Jontae was bullied by his classmates because he was ugly and black, Jontae also tried not to mess up there, he was battered because he was beaten, Joe also saw that Jontae was being bullied there. Joe and those who bullied Jontae had an unexpected fight. happen to Joe winning the fight and the bully ran away. Several years passed, Jontae graduated from school and started a new life and looking for work. But on the first day he worked no one accepted him, there he had to pay for an apartment but he had no money and from the apartment, Joe came to his apartment and he offered him a place to live. And it was also there that, Joe offered to sell drugs and firearms. Jontae also accepted the offer and he became a successful person at that time.

 

 


 

Questions

Character Story Pertama: No

Durasi bermain di JG:RP: 3 - 6 bulan

Character Baru

Account UCP yang saya miliki:
@GlockBeam

 

Account Forum yang saya miliki:

 

@GlockBeam

Saya GlockBeam selaku pemilik account UCP GlockBeam bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Jontae Colleman) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain.

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Sebelum melanjutkan revisi, mohon dijawab pertanyaan di bawah ini:

  1. Apakah ini adalah pertama kali kamu membuat Character Story ? (Ya/Tidak)
  2. Sudah berapa lama kamu main JG:RP? ( Kurang dari 1 bulan / 1 - 3 bulan / 4 - 6 bulan / 6 bulan - 1 tahun / 1 tahun lebih / 3 tahun lebih / 5 tahun lebih )
  3. Apakah character ini baru kamu buat atau baru melakukan prosess Namechange ? (Buat baru/Namechange)
  4. Apakah kamu memiliki account UCP selain yang kamu mainkan saat ini? (Ya/Tidak)
  5. Apakah kamu memiliki account Forum selain yang kamu pakai saat ini? (Ya/Tidak)
  6. Dimana tempat kamu bermain sekarang? (Di rumah / Di warnet)

 

PENTING: Harap diperhatikan ketentuan dibawah ini!

  1. Menggunakan font yang mudah dibaca (Arial, Tahoma, atau Verdana). Font size: 14, dan jangan diberikan atribut berlebihan (BoldItalic, atau Underline)
  2. Pastikan format penulisan Justify yaitu rata kanan-kiri menggunakan tombol image.png pada toolbar di atas.
  3. Tidak boleh ada plagiarisme! ( Silahkan cari di internet untuk plagiarism checker, contoh: https://smallseotools.com/plagiarism-checker/ )
  4. Ejaan, tanda baca, dan grammar harus sesuai dengan standar bahasa yang dipilih (Bahasa Indonesia atau English).
  5. Character story minimal harus memiliki 300 kata yang dipecah menjadi minimal 3 paragraph. 
  6. Gunakan huruf kapital sesuai penempatan kata dan juga yang baik dan benar.
  7. Untuk mengubah story / cerita character kamu, gunakan feature edit yang sudah disediakan:
    Spoiler

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Posted (edited)
8 minutes ago, tiawman said:

Sebelum melanjutkan revisi, mohon dijawab pertanyaan di bawah ini:

  1. Apakah ini adalah pertama kali kamu membuat Character Story ? (Ya/Tidak)
  2. Sudah berapa lama kamu main JG:RP? ( Kurang dari 1 bulan / 1 - 3 bulan / 4 - 6 bulan / 6 bulan - 1 tahun / 1 tahun lebih / 3 tahun lebih / 5 tahun lebih )
  3. Apakah character ini baru kamu buat atau baru melakukan prosess Namechange ? (Buat baru/Namechange)
  4. Apakah kamu memiliki account UCP selain yang kamu mainkan saat ini? (Ya/Tidak)
  5. Apakah kamu memiliki account Forum selain yang kamu pakai saat ini? (Ya/Tidak)
  6. Dimana tempat kamu bermain sekarang? (Di rumah / Di warnet)

 

PENTING: Harap diperhatikan ketentuan dibawah ini!

  1. Menggunakan font yang mudah dibaca (Arial, Tahoma, atau Verdana). Font size: 14, dan jangan diberikan atribut berlebihan (BoldItalic, atau Underline)
  2. Pastikan format penulisan Justify yaitu rata kanan-kiri menggunakan tombol image.png pada toolbar di atas.
  3. Tidak boleh ada plagiarisme! ( Silahkan cari di internet untuk plagiarism checker, contoh: https://smallseotools.com/plagiarism-checker/ )
  4. Ejaan, tanda baca, dan grammar harus sesuai dengan standar bahasa yang dipilih (Bahasa Indonesia atau English).
  5. Character story minimal harus memiliki 300 kata yang dipecah menjadi minimal 3 paragraph. 
  6. Gunakan huruf kapital sesuai penempatan kata dan juga yang baik dan benar.
  7. Untuk mengubah story / cerita character kamu, gunakan feature edit yang sudah disediakan:
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    edit.png

     

 

1.tidak
2.1-3 bulan
3.Buat baru 
4. Cuman ini tidak ada lagi yang lain
5.Cuman ini

6.Warnet
 

Edited by GlockBeam
Posted (edited)
9 minutes ago, tiawman said:
  • gendutnih
  • dapek
  • xteh
  • bewokkece
  • ucokkrew

Apakah UCP di atas punya kamu?

Itu bukan UCP saya, dan saya tidak tau itu punya siapa, saya tidak mempunyai account salain ini bang. @tiawman

Edited by GlockBeam
Posted

Adapun revisi yang harus kamu selesaikan adalah sebagai berikut.

  • "The next day Jontae he entered a school that he considered mature for himself" hapus bagian yang saya coret.
  • "to change the fate of his parents, because Jontae" hapus coma sebelum because.
  • Pada paragraf kedua terdapat kata "happened", ubah menjadi "to happen".
  • "his friend accused Jontae of carrying the item there" ubah menjadi "and his friend accused Jontae of carrying the item there"
  • "there he had to pay for an apartment but he had no money and from the apartment Joe came to his apartment" tambahkan koma sebelum Joe.
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Helper Team
Character Story

Dear @GlockBeam,

 

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to ACCEPT your request. Please read this guide to activate your character story In-Game via our UCP Website.

We hope that you may use this character story to further develop your character.

 

Sincerely,
@tiawman
JG:RP Helper Team

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