pending Alonzo_Herrera [Dauntless]

[Dauntless]

Alonzo_Herrera

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     Alonzo Herrera was born at Mexico City, on 24th December 2000. Alonzo raised by his mother Andrea Herrera because of his father has been killed by a random bullet during war between 2 kingpin drug dealer at their own neighborhood. Alonzo's childhood are really though, he needs to taking care of his mother while studying at University of Mexico and really need to pay attention because his mother have disease cancer. Alonzo was really stressed out, but he was trying his best to do both, so on 2020 he was graduate and get Bachelor Degree title. His mother passed away 7days later after Alonzo graduate. Alonzo was really in tears on a few months because he was still thinking about his mother, then he decides to moving on by leaving Mexico City and going to Los Angeles. Since that, he prepared all of his stuff and passport and making a plan what will he do while arrived at Los Santos. After his plan and his commitment are made.

 

     On 20th February 2021, Alonzo arrived at Los Santos. Alonzo was looking for apartment to rent and got some places called Ganton, he live there day by day while finding a job. After 2 weeks later he finally got a job at Ganton GYM as a staff. Since that he is already making a lot of money and buying a new house near Santa Maria Beach. At one moment there are robbery on progress at Ganton GYM while he was working, he can't do anything because there are 4 man with firearms at that moment. About 5 - 7 minutes some miracle happened, cops are coming and surround the place. The robbers decide to give up.

 

     After that situation, Alonzo was thinking to be a Police and want to eradicate all the criminals at that town. Because he can't do anything while being a civilian, he didn't have any authority. He decided to resign from his job and now he's preparing all the papers to apply to Los Santos Police Department.

 

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Questions

Character Story Pertama: Yes

Durasi bermain di JG:RP: Kurang dari 1 bulan

URL Namechange:

Account UCP yang saya miliki:
Dauntless

 

Account Forum yang saya miliki:
Dauntless

 

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Saya Dauntless selaku pemilik account UCP Dauntless bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Alonzo_Herrera) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain.

[tiawman]

Sebelum melanjutkan revisi, mohon dijawab pertanyaan di bawah ini:

1. Apakah ini adalah pertama kali kamu membuat Character Story ? (Ya/Tidak)
2. Sudah berapa lama kamu main JG:RP? ( Kurang dari 1 bulan / 1 - 3 bulan / 4 - 6 bulan / 6 bulan - 1 tahun / 1 tahun lebih / 3 tahun lebih / 5 tahun lebih )
3. Apakah character ini baru kamu buat atau baru melakukan prosess Namechange ? (Buat baru/Namechange)
4. Apakah kamu memiliki account UCP selain yang kamu mainkan saat ini? (Ya/Tidak)
5. Apakah kamu memiliki account Forum selain yang kamu pakai saat ini? (Ya/Tidak)
6. Dimana tempat kamu bermain sekarang? (Di rumah / Di warnet)

 

PENTING: Harap diperhatikan ketentuan dibawah ini!

1. Menggunakan font yang mudah dibaca (Arial, Tahoma, atau Verdana). Font size: 14, dan jangan diberikan atribut berlebihan (Bold, Italic, atau Underline)
2. Pastikan format penulisan Justify yaitu rata kanan-kiri menggunakan tombol  pada toolbar di atas.
3. Tidak boleh ada plagiarisme! ( Silahkan cari di internet untuk plagiarism checker, contoh: https://smallseotools.com/plagiarism-checker/ )
4. Ejaan, tanda baca, dan grammar harus sesuai dengan standar bahasa yang dipilih (Bahasa Indonesia atau English).
5. Character story minimal harus memiliki 300 kata yang dipecah menjadi minimal 3 paragraph. 
6. Gunakan huruf kapital sesuai penempatan kata dan juga yang baik dan benar.
7. Untuk mengubah story / cerita character kamu, gunakan feature edit yang sudah disediakan:
   Spoiler

   

    

[Dauntless]

4 minutes ago, tiawman said:

Sebelum melanjutkan revisi, mohon dijawab pertanyaan di bawah ini:

1. Apakah ini adalah pertama kali kamu membuat Character Story ? (Ya/Tidak)
2. Sudah berapa lama kamu main JG:RP? ( Kurang dari 1 bulan / 1 - 3 bulan / 4 - 6 bulan / 6 bulan - 1 tahun / 1 tahun lebih / 3 tahun lebih / 5 tahun lebih )
3. Apakah character ini baru kamu buat atau baru melakukan prosess Namechange ? (Buat baru/Namechange)
4. Apakah kamu memiliki account UCP selain yang kamu mainkan saat ini? (Ya/Tidak)
5. Apakah kamu memiliki account Forum selain yang kamu pakai saat ini? (Ya/Tidak)
6. Dimana tempat kamu bermain sekarang? (Di rumah / Di warnet)

Poin 1, Iya.

Poin 2, Kurang dari 1 bulan.

Poin 3, Karakter baru.

Poin 4, Tidak.

Poin 5, Tidak.

Poin 6, Dirumah.

[tiawman]

• Almo Miscz
• Jakaaaaaaaaaaa
• Jamalintek
• Reyl

Apakah UCP diatas punya kamu?

[Dauntless]

28 minutes ago, tiawman said:

• Almo Miscz
• Jakaaaaaaaaaaa
• Jamalintek
• Reyl

Apakah UCP diatas punya kamu?

Tidak, saya tidak mengetahui ke empat UCP tersebut.

[tiawman]

Adapun revisi yang harus kamu selesaikan adalah sebagai berikut.

1. Pada masing-masing paragraf gunakan format indentasi dengan jarak 5 spasi.

2. Setelah foto, tambahkan jarak sebelum masuk ke paragraf pertama. Jangan terlalu mepet.

3. Pada paragraf pertama dan kalimat pertama, terdapat kata "neighbordhood". Ubah kata tersebut menjadi "neighborhood"

4. Pada paragraf kedua, terdapat kata "apartement". Ubah kata tersebut menjadi "apartment"

 

Jika kamu sudah menyelesaikan perintah di atas, harap untuk lebih teliti lagi dan baca dengan baik.

[Dauntless]

1 hour ago, tiawman said:

Adapun revisi yang harus kamu selesaikan adalah sebagai berikut.

1. Pada masing-masing paragraf gunakan format indentasi dengan jarak 5 spasi.

2. Setelah foto, tambahkan jarak sebelum masuk ke paragraf pertama. Jangan terlalu mepet.

3. Pada paragraf pertama dan kalimat pertama, terdapat kata "neighbordhood". Ubah kata tersebut menjadi "neighborhood"

4. Pada paragraf kedua, terdapat kata "apartement". Ubah kata tersebut menjadi "apartment"

 

Jika kamu sudah menyelesaikan perintah di atas, harap untuk lebih teliti lagi dan baca dengan baik.

Sudah, mohon diperiksa kembali.

[tiawman]

5. Adapun revisi selanjutnya yang harus kamu selesaikan adalah sebagai berikut.

• "civillian" harusnya "civilian"
• "departement" harusnya "department"
• "happend" harusnya "happened"
• "Since that he already making a lot money" ubah menjadi "Since that he is already making a lot of money".
• "because he still thinking about his mother" ubah menjadi "because he wa still thinking about his mother"
• "he need to taking care of his mother" ubah menjadi "he needs to taking care of his mother"
• "he don't have any authority" ubah menjadi "he didn't have any authority"
• "then he decide to moving on by leaving Mexico City" ubah menjadi "then he decides to moving on by leaving Mexico City"
• "He decide to resign from his job and now he preparing all the papers" ubah menjadi "He decided to resign from his job and now he's preparing all the papers"

[Dauntless]

23 hours ago, tiawman said:

5. Adapun revisi selanjutnya yang harus kamu selesaikan adalah sebagai berikut.

• "civillian" harusnya "civilian"
• "departement" harusnya "department"
• "happend" harusnya "happened"
• "Since that he already making a lot money" ubah menjadi "Since that he is already making a lot of money".
• "because he still thinking about his mother" ubah menjadi "because he wa still thinking about his mother"
• "he need to taking care of his mother" ubah menjadi "he needs to taking care of his mother"
• "he don't have any authority" ubah menjadi "he didn't have any authority"
• "then he decide to moving on by leaving Mexico City" ubah menjadi "then he decides to moving on by leaving Mexico City"
• "He decide to resign from his job and now he preparing all the papers" ubah menjadi "He decided to resign from his job and now he's preparing all the papers"

Done.

[tiawman]

Poin 1, 8 dan 9 masih belum. Cek lebih teliti lagi.

[Dauntless]

On 12/17/2022 at 1:25 PM, tiawman said:

Poin 1, 8 dan 9 masih belum. Cek lebih teliti lagi.

Ya, sudah.

[tiawman]

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Dear @Dauntless,

 

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to ACCEPT your request. Please read this guide to activate your character story In-Game via our UCP Website.

We hope that you may use this character story to further develop your character.

 

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