$Lost$ Posted October 11, 2022 Posted October 11, 2022 Mordecai Testacea Mordecai 'Sabath' Testacea also known as Cai. A Jewish boy who was born in Galilee, Israel, on Saturday, May 13 1988. Son of a Jewish family, his family is not so obedient about their religion, his father are a Chief Inspector of Israel Police department named Betsabe Testacea, and his mother are a doctor of Israel Fire department named Kannelith Testacea. Cai is the first child of Testacea family, he also have three younger brothers, the second child named Moses Testacea, and he also has two little sisters named Leorra and Leonny Testacea, they are twin. His father always educated Cai to be a strong man and wanted Mordecai to follow his career but Mordecai always said will decide about it later. Beside of that, his mom, Kannelith always support all of his child dream. A few years later, Mordecai has decided his career path, he decided to follow what his father told him a few years ago, Mordecai continued his education in Sardar Vallabhbhai Patel National Police Academy, Galilee. 5 years passed, he became a criminal intelligence in Israel police departement, he got a lot of partner there. Mordecai is smart and always succesfully solved any investigation with good result, because of that he always received awards from the department. One month later, Mordecai and his partner, Tobias Jehova is on investigation about a drug dealer in a old town at Galilee. They found the drug dealer, Mordecai and Tobias tried to arrest the drug dealer, unfortunately the drug dealer started a fired shots towards Mordecai and Tobias, Tobias got shooted because of the drug dealer, when Mordecai saw the drug dealer just opened fire towards his friend he quickly shots the drug dealer and made the drug dealer died on the scene. He quickly called for a backup, luckily Tobias was able to survive from the scene. Two weeks later after the scene, Mordecai received a bad news from his brother, Moses, he said that his mother just got shot by robbers, Mordecai shock after heard the news, he quickly went to the hospital to look after his mother. Unfortunately his mother can't survive from her critical conditions, his family became saddened upon the passed of his mother. After the funeral Mordecai is thought about his career, he decided to resign from the Israel Police Department and wanted to continue his mother career but in different a way, he wanted to became a firefighter. Few years after Mordecai resignation from the Police department he succesfully graduated from Azrielie University of Medicine in Galilee. Two months later he told his family that he decided to moved to San Andreas and will be live there. After a yeas in San Andreas he has successfully became a firefighter and served in San Andreas Fire department and became a Fire Lieutenant. Questions Character Story Pertama: No Durasi bermain di JG:RP: 3 tahun lebih URL Namechange: https://jogjagamers.org/topic/231270-cn-neil-fletcher-to-mordecai-testacea-lost/#comment-2245282 Account UCP yang saya miliki: Lost Account Forum yang saya miliki:Lost Saya Lost selaku pemilik account UCP Lost bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Mordecai Testacea) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain.
$RafkyPramana$ Posted October 11, 2022 Posted October 11, 2022 Sebelum melanjutkan revisi, mohon dijawab pertanyaan di bawah ini: Apakah ini adalah pertama kali kamu membuat Character Story ? (Ya/Tidak) Sudah berapa lama kamu main JG:RP? ( Kurang dari 1 bulan / 1 - 3 bulan / 4 - 6 bulan / 6 bulan - 1 tahun / 1 tahun lebih / 3 tahun lebih / 5 tahun lebih ) Apakah character ini baru kamu buat atau baru melakukan prosess Namechange ? (Buat baru/Namechange) Apakah kamu memiliki account UCP selain yang kamu mainkan saat ini? (Ya/Tidak) Apakah kamu memiliki account Forum selain yang kamu pakai saat ini? (Ya/Tidak) Dimana tempat kamu bermain sekarang? (Di rumah / Di warnet) PENTING: Harap diperhatikan ketentuan dibawah ini! Menggunakan font yang mudah dibaca (Arial, Tahoma, atau Verdana). Font size: 14, dan jangan diberikan atribut berlebihan (Bold, Italic, atau Underline) Pastikan format penulisan Justify yaitu rata kanan-kiri menggunakan tombol pada toolbar di atas. Tidak boleh ada plagiarisme! ( Silahkan cari di internet untuk plagiarism checker, contoh: https://smallseotools.com/plagiarism-checker/ ) Ejaan, tanda baca, dan grammar harus sesuai dengan standar bahasa yang dipilih (Bahasa Indonesia atau English). Character story minimal harus memiliki 300 kata yang dipecah menjadi minimal 3 paragraph. Gunakan huruf kapital sesuai penempatan kata dan juga yang baik dan benar. Untuk mengubah story / cerita character kamu, gunakan feature edit yang sudah disediakan: Spoiler
$Lost$ Posted October 11, 2022 Author Posted October 11, 2022 9 hours ago, RafkyPramana said: Sebelum melanjutkan revisi, mohon dijawab pertanyaan di bawah ini: Apakah ini adalah pertama kali kamu membuat Character Story ? (Ya/Tidak) Sudah berapa lama kamu main JG:RP? ( Kurang dari 1 bulan / 1 - 3 bulan / 4 - 6 bulan / 6 bulan - 1 tahun / 1 tahun lebih / 3 tahun lebih / 5 tahun lebih ) Apakah character ini baru kamu buat atau baru melakukan prosess Namechange ? (Buat baru/Namechange) Apakah kamu memiliki account UCP selain yang kamu mainkan saat ini? (Ya/Tidak) Apakah kamu memiliki account Forum selain yang kamu pakai saat ini? (Ya/Tidak) Dimana tempat kamu bermain sekarang? (Di rumah / Di warnet) PENTING: Harap diperhatikan ketentuan dibawah ini! Menggunakan font yang mudah dibaca (Arial, Tahoma, atau Verdana). Font size: 14, dan jangan diberikan atribut berlebihan (Bold, Italic, atau Underline) Pastikan format penulisan Justify yaitu rata kanan-kiri menggunakan tombol pada toolbar di atas. Tidak boleh ada plagiarisme! ( Silahkan cari di internet untuk plagiarism checker, contoh: https://smallseotools.com/plagiarism-checker/ ) Ejaan, tanda baca, dan grammar harus sesuai dengan standar bahasa yang dipilih (Bahasa Indonesia atau English). Character story minimal harus memiliki 300 kata yang dipecah menjadi minimal 3 paragraph. Gunakan huruf kapital sesuai penempatan kata dan juga yang baik dan benar. Untuk mengubah story / cerita character kamu, gunakan feature edit yang sudah disediakan: Reveal hidden contents 1. Tidak. 2. 3 Tahun lebih. 3. Namechange. 4. Dulu ada tapi sudah di merge dan di block. 5. Tidak. 6. Dirumah.
$RafkyPramana$ Posted October 12, 2022 Posted October 12, 2022 Hi @Lost, after taking my time reviewing and analyzing the character story that you have made, here is the point(s) that need to be fixed; Spoiler On 10/11/2022 at 8:16 PM, Lost said: Mordecai Testacea Mordecai 'Sabath' Testacea is also known as Cai. A Jewish boy who was born in Galilee, Israel, on Saturday, May 13 1988. Son of a Jewish family, his family is not so obedient about their religion, his father is a Chief Inspector of Israel Police Departement named Betsabe Testacea, and his mother is a doctor of Israel Fire Departement (department) named Kannelith Testacea. Cai is the first child of Testacea family, he also have three younger brothers, the second child named Moses Testacea, and he also has two little sisters named Leorra and Leonny Testacea, they are twin. His father always educated Cai to be a strong man and wanted Mordecai to follow his career but Mordecai always said will thinking (decide) about it later. Beside of that, his mom, Kannelith always supports all of his child dream. A few years later, Mordecai has decided his career path, he decided to follow what his father words (told him) a few years ago, Mordecai continues his education in Sardar Vallabhbhai Patel National Police Academy, Galilee. 5 years already (passed), he became a criminal intelligence officer in Israel police departement (department), he got a lot of partner there. Mordecai is smart and always succesfully solved any investigation with a good results, because of that he always got (received) awards from the departement (department). One month later, Mordecai and his partner, Tobias Jehova is on investigation about a drug dealer in the a old town at Galilee. They found the drug dealer, Mordecai and Tobias tries to arrest the drug dealer, unfortunately the drug dealer starts a shot fired (started fired shots) towards Mordecai and Tobias, Tobias got shots because of the drug dealer, when Mordecai saw the drug dealer just open the fire towards his friend he quickly shots the drug dealer and make the drug dealer died on the scene. He quickly call for a backup, luckly (luckily) Tobias was can (able) to survived from the scene. Two weeks later after the scene, Mordecai got (received) a bad news from his brother, Moses, he said that his mother just got shooted (shot) by robbers, after heard that news Mordecai is shock (Mordecai shook after heard the news), he quickly going (went) to the hospital to look his mother conditions (to look after his mother). Unfortunately his mother can't survived from her critical conditions, his family is so sad. (his family became saddened upon the passed of his mother). After the funeral Mordecai is thinking (thought) about his career, he decided to resign from the Israel Police Departement and wanted to continues his mother career but in a different way, he wanted to became a firefighter. Few years later after Mordecai's resign (resignation) from the Police Departement (department), he successfully graduated from the Azrielie University of Medicine in Galilee. Two months later he told his family that he decided to moved to San Andreas and will be live there. One years (After a year) in San Andreas he has successfully became a firefighter and served in San Andreas Fire Departement (department) and became a Fire Engineer. Notes: Bold-ed means that another proper word shall be added to the paragraph or the highlighted word shall be fixed with the proper spelling. Underlined means that the word shall be written in past tense. Strikethrough-ed means the word shall be removed or replaced. If you have any questions just reply them down below, have a good day! RafkyPramana
$Lost$ Posted October 12, 2022 Author Posted October 12, 2022 Updated, @RafkyPramana thanks for the corrections.
$RafkyPramana$ Posted October 13, 2022 Posted October 13, 2022 Jogjagamers Reality Project Helper Team Character Story Dear @Lost I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to ACCEPT your request. Please read this guide to activate your character story In-Game via our UCP Website. We hope that you may use this character story to further develop your character. Sincerely,@RafkyPramana JG:RP Helper Team
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