Connor_Rakhton Posted February 28, 2021 Posted February 28, 2021 Jesus_Hodson Jesus "Hoody" Hodson is an Afro-Mexicans boy who lives with his parents in San Diego, a coastal city in Southern California located in the southwest corner of the mainland United States of America. Hoody is one and only children of Ricardo (Mexican) and Rosa (African-American) his father's job is as a hunter in the wilderness and his mother's job as a doctor in a veterinary clinic. Jesus, who at that time was fourteen years old, preferred to spend his time hunting in the forest with his father. Ricardo as his father taught Jesus how to shoot correctly and precisely. The day passed, Jesus, who at that time was already growing up, liked the names of various weapons, even though they were short and long barrels, so he decided to join one of the airsoft guns in Los Santos, America and met a member there named Andregaz and became his best friend. Hoody is also like to play football with friends. Jesus' father and mother wanted him to continue his education at one of the best universities in California, San Diego to learn more new things but Jesus refused because of his interest in weaponry. Jesus left his parents when he was eighteen years old and went to the city of Los Santos to continue what he loved since childhood. He started living alone in the city of Los Santos and lived in an apartment that only had three small rooms but Jesus didn't complain about that. he works as a street trash cleaner to fill his daily life and earn money. At that time Jesus realized that education was very important to get a job easily. but Jesus spoke to himself "don't drag on in regret, do what you think is right because at the end there must be a right way, Until now, Jesus is adamant not to give up easily. Questions Tujuan membuat character story: ingin beroleplay Account UCP yang saya miliki: Connor_Rakhton Account Forum yang saya miliki:Connor_Rakhton Berapa lama saya sudah main di JGRP: 2 tahun lebih Saya biasa main JGRP di: Hanya di rumah Saya Connor_Rakhton selaku pemilik account UCP Connor_Rakhton bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Jesus_Hodson) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain.
Aheng Posted February 28, 2021 Posted February 28, 2021 Ada akun UCP lain? Jawab jujur lebih dihargai. Karakter kamu sekarang level berapa?
Connor_Rakhton Posted February 28, 2021 Author Posted February 28, 2021 1. Hanya ini saja uncle.. 2. Level 9
Aheng Posted February 28, 2021 Posted February 28, 2021 Berikut revisinya: Gunakan indent pada setiap awalan paragraf/bisa gunakan lima kali spasi. Terdapat beberapa kesalahan pada penulisan grammar. Bisa cek dengan berbagai grammar checker tools di google. Ganti kata "Los Angeles" menjadi "Los Santos".
Aheng Posted March 2, 2021 Posted March 2, 2021 To @Connor_RakhtonI am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to APPROVE your request. Please read the following guide to activate your link your store to your In-Game account: Sincerely,@NFSSJG:RP Staff Team.
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