pending Demare_Oeeb [mikeeeee]

mikeeeee · January 8, 2023

Demare_Oeeb

Los Santos in 2005, a child name Demare Oeeb was born, he was born into a simple family that could be said to be well off. Demare Oeeb lives with his parents in a housing complex that is prone to criminal activity, his father works as a shopkeeper and his mother is just a housewife, he likes to hang out with people with naughty activities and often riots, because of his association, he often goes out and comes home at night, because of that, he also rarely gets together with his family because his father is always busy with his work, he was once offered criminal activities with his friends, because it was profitable for Demare to accept the invitation, where his father worked, he didn't ask where they were going to commit the robbery, he just immediately agreed and immediately joined his friends.

When they arrived at the market, they immediately went down and pointed their guns at the cashier and the people who were inside, Demare's father, who is urinating out of toilet and saw that there was already a group of young people with guns, instantly Demare looked directly at his father's face and was shocked because the market he robbed was the market where his father worked, Demare's father did not know Demare's face at that time, because Demare was using a skimask that covered all of his face, Demare continued these activities, after taking all the money Demare and his friends quickly ran away and fled using a friend's car, and at that moment the police came and immediately chased Demare and his firiends, the chase ensued, Demare was very nervous when the chase happened, his friend told Demare to carry out a drive-by without further ado, Demare immediately got out of his body and shot at the police who were behind him, but Demare's friend who was driving his car lost control and hit the wall of someone's house, they all fainted from the crash and the police caught them immediately.

Demare woke up in the hospital and was handcuffed, the police were in front of him and there were also Demare's parents, Demare was confused because he didn't remember anything, the police explained what happened and Demare was shocked, Demare's mother was crying at that time, except for his father, Demare's father was very disappointed in Demare because he never thought that Demare would do this, Demare was given time to talk to his parents before being taken to the prison cell, Demare's father said to Demare not to live in his house anymore and never come back to live with him and his mother, Demare cried with regret, Demare was taken by car to the police station and immediately put on trial and jailed for 6 year. After 6 years Demare was free and he started new life without friends and family.

Questions

Character Story Pertama: No

Durasi bermain di JG:RP: 1 - 2 tahun

URL Namechange: -

Account UCP yang saya miliki: Hanya ini

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Saya mikeeeee selaku pemilik account UCP mikeeeee bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Demare_Oeeb) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain.

Edited January 11, 2023 by mikeeeee

iamcollapse · January 8, 2023

Sebelum melanjutkan revisi, mohon dijawab pertanyaan di bawah ini:

Apakah ini adalah pertama kali kamu membuat Character Story ? (Ya/Tidak)
Sudah berapa lama kamu main JG:RP? ( Kurang dari 1 bulan / 1 - 3 bulan / 4 - 6 bulan / 6 bulan - 1 tahun / 1 tahun lebih / 3 tahun lebih / 5 tahun lebih )
Apakah character ini baru kamu buat atau baru melakukan prosess Namechange ? (Buat baru/Namechange)
Apakah kamu memiliki account UCP selain yang kamu mainkan saat ini? (Ya/Tidak)
Apakah kamu memiliki account Forum selain yang kamu pakai saat ini? (Ya/Tidak)
Dimana tempat kamu bermain sekarang? (Di rumah / Di warnet)

PENTING: Harap diperhatikan ketentuan dibawah ini!

Menggunakan font yang mudah dibaca (Arial, Tahoma, atau Verdana). Font size: 14, dan jangan diberikan atribut berlebihan (Bold, Italic, atau Underline)
Pastikan format penulisan Justify yaitu rata kanan-kiri menggunakan tombol pada toolbar di atas.
Tidak boleh ada plagiarisme! ( Silahkan cari di internet untuk plagiarism checker, contoh: https://smallseotools.com/plagiarism-checker/ )
Ejaan, tanda baca, dan grammar harus sesuai dengan standar bahasa yang dipilih (Bahasa Indonesia atau English).
Character story minimal harus memiliki 300 kata yang dipecah menjadi minimal 3 paragraph.
Gunakan huruf kapital sesuai penempatan kata dan juga yang baik dan benar.
Untuk mengubah story / cerita character kamu, gunakan feature edit yang sudah disediakan:

Spoiler

mikeeeee · January 9, 2023

1. Tidak.

2. 1-2 Tahun lebih.

3. Buat baru.

4. Tidak.

5. Tidak.

6. Di rumah.

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Sudah saya koreksi, Silahkan cek kembali.

Edited January 9, 2023 by mikeeeee

iamcollapse · January 10, 2023

Berikut poin-poin revisi yang harus kamu ikuti dengan baik:

Ejaan, tanda baca, dan grammar harus sesuai dengan standar bahasa yang dipilih (Bahasa Indonesia atau English).
Gunakan huruf kapital sesuai penempatan kata dan juga yang baik dan benar.
Jika ada kesalahan penulisan atau typo, harap langsung diubah.
Jarak antara foto dan judul jangan terlalu, dan pastikan foto kamu benar-benar di tengah.
Setiap awal paragraf kasih 5 spasi agar menjorok kekanan.
Judul pada harap di tengah, nama karakter kamu pada judul ada dikiri penulisannya harap bikin jadi ditengah.

Harap dibaca dengan teliti, agar cepat beres.

Tolong jawab dengan jujur, apakah UCP dibawah ini milik kamu?

mikeeeee · January 10, 2023

Sudah saya perbaiki kembali, bisa dikoreksi lagi.

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Tolong jawab dengan jujur, apakah UCP dibawah ini milik kamu?

Jawab: Ya UCP ini milik saya, UCP pertama saya sudah dibanned, Dan saya sudah Request Unban tetapi UCP pertama saya masi tetap stay banned, Dan admin dimdimdam yang membanned UCP saya menyuruh saya membuat UCP baru, Makanya saya bikin UCP baru.

Edited January 10, 2023 by mikeeeee

iamcollapse · January 11, 2023

Berarti kedua UCP tersebut milik kamu juga?

mikeeeee · January 11, 2023

Itu bukan UCP saya min, jangan asal nuduh min.

Edited January 11, 2023 by mikeeeee

iamcollapse · January 11, 2023

On 1/8/2023 at 2:31 PM, mikeeeee said:

Demare_Oeeb

tulisan ini pada judul simpan di tengah, jangan di kiri.

mikeeeee · January 11, 2023

Sudah saya perbaiki.

iamcollapse · January 11, 2023

On 1/8/2023 at 2:31 PM, mikeeeee said:

Los Santos in 2005, a child name Demare Oeeb was born, he was born into a simple family that could be said to be well off, Demare Oeeb lives with his parents in a housing complex that is prone to criminal activity, his Father works as a shopkeeper and his Mother is just a housewife, he likes to hang out with people with naughty activities and often riots, because of his association, he often goes out and comes home at night, because of that, he also rarely gets together with his family because his Father is always busy with his work, he was once offered criminal activities with his friends, because it was profitable for Demare to accept the invitation, where his Father worked, he didn't ask where they were going to commit the robbery, he just immediately agreed and immediately joined his friends.

When they arrived at the market, they immediately went down and pointed their guns at the cashier and the people who were inside, Demare's Father, who is urinating out of toilet and saw that there was already a group of young people with guns, instantly Demare looked directly at his Father's face and was shocked because the Market he robbed was the Market where his father worked, Demare's Father did not know Demare's face at that time, because Demare was using a skimask that covered all of his face, Demare continued these activities, After taking all the money Demare and his friends quickly ran away and fled using a friend's car, and at that moment The Police came and immediately chased Demare and his Friends. The chase ensued, Demare was very nervous when the chase happened, his friend told Demare to carry out a drive-by without further ado, Demare immediately got out of his body and shot at the police who were behind him, but Demare's Friend who was driving his car lost control and hit the wall of someone's house. they all fainted from the crash and the police caught them immediately.

Demare woke up in the hospital and was handcuffed, the police were in front of him and there were also Demare's parents, Demare was confused because he didn't remember anything, the Police explained what happened and Demare was shocked, Demare's Mother was crying at that time, except for his Father, Demare's Father was very disappointed in Demare because he never thought that Demare would do this, Demare was given time to talk to his parents before being taken to The Prison Cell, Demare's Father said to Demare not to live in his house anymore and never come back to live with Him and his Mother, Demare cried with regret, Demare was taken by car to the Police Station and immediately put on trial and jailed for 6 years.

After 6 Years, Demare was free and he started new Life without Friends and Family.

Dibikin 3 paragraf aja, itu paragraf terakhir disatukan saja ke paragraf ke 3. dan pada kata "Life" dan "Friends" tidak usah memakai huruf kapital.

mikeeeee · January 11, 2023

Sudah saya perbaiki.

iamcollapse · January 11, 2023

On 1/8/2023 at 2:31 PM, mikeeeee said:

Family.