Myesha_Almira Posted July 23, 2022 Posted July 23, 2022 (edited) Izabel_Carballo Izabel "Eliza" Carballo Izabel Carballo is a 20 years old woman, who was born in the United States, on August 18th. Everyone called her Iza since day one and she's an American-Mexican. She lived in Mexico for a few years with her parents and her 3 brothers. Her family was in an unstable financial situation, so they decided to move to the State of Arizona for a better economic situation, where it's her parents' hometown too. They started a new life happily as a family. Iza was the happiest when she was with her family, especially with her brothers. After a while of staying in Arizona, Iza's parents had enough money to move to Los Santos, San Andreas. They live in a not-so-big house. Iza and her brothers helped their parents to get money. Long-short story, Iza and her brothers were out for a night walk after a long day, they frequently did this for refreshing their minds. When it was almost home, they saw a black van parked in a weird position, it's blocking their way. Her brothers told Iza to stand behind their back. All of a sudden a guy smothered Iza from her back and took her. All of her brothers were hit until unconscious. Iza felt nothing but scared, strangely she couldn't cry. All she felt was anger towards the guys who took her and hurt her brothers. She was taken by a group of unknown criminals. She couldn't leave the place as they wanted Iza to be part of them, even though at first they just wanted to have fun with her. She didn't want to but over time, she blended with the criminals and became part of them. Although she was one of the most wanted criminals in the world, she remains untouchable. Sometimes, Iza missed her family, especially her brothers but she knew she couldn't meet them anymore. She hated the name 'Eliza' as she hated her past, therefore she changed her name to 'Izabel'. Iza's golden era continued and was unbeatable throughout the years. The thoughts of coming back to her family couldn't get out of her mind. She tried to find her brothers each day. Unfortunately, one of her subordinate saw that she tried to reach out her family. He told his boss about it and he didn't like it. They planned to get rid of Iza, but it was not that easy. Iza was everywhere and she knew she would get terminated. Iza killed everyone before they did it to her, she just realized how bad her world was. She finally left the place and continued to find her brother. She also knew one of her brothers was in Los Santos. She hoped he could take her back as a family. After all the things she has been through, the only thing she needs is her family. Questions Character Story Pertama: No Durasi bermain di JG:RP: 1 - 2 tahun URL Namechange: https://jogjagamers.org/topic/228953-cn-letizia_zelmira-to-izabel_carballo-mightykookz/#comment-2222255 Account UCP yang saya miliki: mightykookz Account Forum yang saya miliki: @Myesha_Almira Saya Myesha_Almira selaku pemilik account UCP mightykookz bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Izabel_Carballo) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain. Edited July 24, 2022 by Myesha_Almira fixing grammar
ghii Posted July 23, 2022 Posted July 23, 2022 Sebelum melanjutkan revisi, mohon dijawab pertanyaan di bawah ini: Apakah ini adalah pertama kali kamu membuat Character Story ? (Ya/Tidak) Sudah berapa lama kamu main JG:RP? ( Kurang dari 1 bulan / 1 - 3 bulan / 4 - 6 bulan / 6 bulan - 1 tahun / 1 tahun lebih / 3 tahun lebih / 5 tahun lebih ) Apakah character ini baru kamu buat atau baru melakukan prosess Namechange ? (Buat baru/Namechange) Apakah kamu memiliki account UCP selain yang kamu mainkan saat ini? (Ya/Tidak) Apakah kamu memiliki account Forum selain yang kamu pakai saat ini? (Ya/Tidak) Dimana tempat kamu bermain sekarang? (Di rumah / Di warnet) PENTING: Harap diperhatikan ketentuan dibawah ini! Menggunakan font yang mudah dibaca (Arial, Tahoma, atau Verdana). Font size: 14, dan jangan diberikan atribut berlebihan (Bold, Italic, atau Underline) Pastikan format penulisan Justify yaitu rata kanan-kiri menggunakan tombol pada toolbar di atas. Tidak boleh ada plagiarisme! ( Silahkan cari di internet untuk plagiarism checker, contoh: https://smallseotools.com/plagiarism-checker/ ) Ejaan, tanda baca, dan grammar harus sesuai dengan standar bahasa yang dipilih (Bahasa Indonesia atau English). Character story minimal harus memiliki 300 kata yang dipecah menjadi minimal 3 paragraph. Gunakan huruf kapital sesuai penempatan kata dan juga yang baik dan benar. Untuk mengubah story / cerita character kamu, gunakan feature edit yang sudah disediakan: Spoiler
Myesha_Almira Posted July 23, 2022 Author Posted July 23, 2022 1. Tidak 2. 1 tahun lebih 3. Namechange 4. Tidak 5. Tidak 6. Di rumah
ghii Posted July 23, 2022 Posted July 23, 2022 Bagian ini diisi sesuai UCP dan akun forum kamu: 6 hours ago, Myesha_Almira said: Account UCP yang saya miliki: Tidak ada Account Forum yang saya miliki: Perbaiki beberapa bagian berikut sesuai dengan keterangan yang diberikan: Quote Izabel Carballo is a 20 years old woman, [who was] born in the United States, on August 18th. Everyone called her Iza since day one and she's an American-Mexican. She lived in Mexico for a few years with her parents and her 3 brothers. Her family was in an unstable financial situation, so they decided to move to the State of Arizona for a better economic situation, where it's her parents' hometown too. They started a new life happily as a family[titik] Iza was the happiest when she was with her family, especially with her brothers. After a while of staying in Arizona, Iza's parents had enough money to move to Los Santos, San Andreas. They live in a not-so-big house[titik] Iza and her brothers helped their parents to get money. Long-short story, Iza and her brothers were out for a night walk after a long day, they frequently did this for refreshing their minds. When it's[was] almost home, they saw a black van parked in a weird position, it's blocking their way. Her brothers told Iza to stand behind their back[titik] a[A kapital]nd all of a sudden a guy smothered Iza from her back and took her. All of her brothers were hit until unconscious. Iza felt nothing but scared, strangely she couldn't cry all[titik] s[S kapital]he felt was anger towards the guys who took her and hurt her brothers. She was taken by a group of unknown criminals[titik] s[S kapital]he couldn't leave the place as they wanted Iza to be part of them, even though at first they just wanted to have fun with her. She didn't want to but over time, she blended with the criminals and became part of them. Although she is[was] one of the most wanted criminals in the world, she remains[ed] untouchable. Sometimes, Iza misses[ed] her family, especially her brothers but she knew she couldn't meet them anymore. She hates[d] the name 'Eliza' as she hates[d] her past, therefore she changed her name to 'Izabel'. Iza's golden era continues[d] and is[was] unbeatable throughout the years. The thoughts of coming back to her family can't[couldn't] get out of her mind[titik] s[S kapital]he tried to find her brothers each day. Unfortunately, one of her subordinate saw that she tried to reach out her family[titik] h[H kapital]e told his boss about it and he didn't like it. They planned to get rid of Iza, but it's[was] not that easy[titik] Iza is[was] everywhere and she knew she would get terminated. Iza killed everyone before they did it to her, she just realized how bad her world is[was]. She finally left the place and continues[d] to find her brother[titik] s[S kapital]he also knew one of her brothers is[was] in Los Santos. She hope[d] he could take her back as a family. After all the things she has been through, the only thing she needs is her family.
Myesha_Almira Posted July 24, 2022 Author Posted July 24, 2022 Sudah saya perbaiki, bisa di cek kembali. Terima kasih.
ghii Posted July 24, 2022 Posted July 24, 2022 Jogjagamers Reality Project Helper Team Character Story Dear @Myesha_Almira, I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to ACCEPT your request. Please read this guide to activate your character story In-Game via our UCP Website. We hope that you may use this character story to further develop your character. Sincerely,@ghnpss JG:RP Helper Team
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