pending Trejo_Henriquez [syairgans]

[Jeffrey_Philips]

Trejo_Henriquez

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     In the rainy night of Los Santos, at the date 12 January 2004. a child by the name of Trejo Henriquez, or usually called by his friends and others Trejo. He's the only child of Tareja Henriquez and Sofia Maritos. Living on the slums of El Corona, Trejo's always gotten onto problem on his school. It isn't the first time he got kicked from the school, as he is lazy and never does study, always is a problematic kid.

     His parents are thinking about getting rid of Trejo away from their house, as Trejo's parents are embarassed of him because their son is always keep on making troubles. So, Tareja got an idea to try and send Trejo to his mother's house or Trejo's grandmother when Trejo's age is 18. Trejo, having no clue of what his father is going to do after he's 18 years old. Keeps on making continous troubles around the Neighbourhood, making the neighbourhood around always talking bad about Trejo's family. Such as his mother doesn't teach him and something like that.

     Time has passed, now this is the day of Trejo's 18th birthday. He is excited about it, not knowing that his parents is waiting for this moment, too. As already said from before, Tareja going to send Trejo to his grandmother's house when Trejo is already 18. After the birthday celebration, his father got into talking with Trejo about sending him to his grandmother's house. Trejo doesn't want to be sent to his grandmother's house, he'd rather stay in hell he said. So he gone to his room and is talking about his close friend, Esaul. Trejo talked about his father's plan on sending him to his grandmother's house. After a long conversation with Esaul, Trejo asked if he can stay with Esaul for a long time till he got enough money to live alone himself. Esaul talked to his mother about Trejo's situation. And Esaul's mother has given Trejo permission to stay on his house. At the same day, on night time. Trejo already prepared on everything, he packed everything he need. So, he ran away from his house and decided to move to Esaul's house. Esaul's family welcomes the presence of Trejo. And now, Trejo lives with Esaul's family. Trejo's parents doesn't seem to care, he lets Trejo lives on Esaul's house rather than theirs. Afterall, Trejo's parent intentions were to get rid of Trejo anways.

 

 

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Durasi bermain di JG:RP: 6 bulan - 1 tahun

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Saya Jeffrey_Philips selaku pemilik account UCP syairgans bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Trejo_Henriquez) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain.

[$Martixel$]

1. 15 minutes ago, Jeffrey_Philips said:

    On the rainy night of Los Santos, at the date 12 January 2004.

   Ubah 'on' menjadi 'in'

2. 16 minutes ago, Jeffrey_Philips said:

   Lives a child by the name of Trejo Henriquez

   Ubah menjadi 'a child named Trejo Henriques was born'

3. 17 minutes ago, Jeffrey_Philips said:

   So, Tareja's got an idea

   Ini engga perlu pake 's

4. 17 minutes ago, Jeffrey_Philips said:

   Tareja's going to send

   Ini juga ga perlu pake 's

5. Ini banyak banget kata Tareja's, itu maksudnya mau menunjukan apa ya? Tareja's kan artinya itu kepemilikan Tareja, tapi dari kalimatnya engga masuk, hanya dibeberapa kalimat yang memang masuk.

[Jeffrey_Philips]

8 minutes ago, Martixel said:

1. Ubah 'on' menjadi 'in'

2. Ubah menjadi 'a child named Trejo Henriques was born'

3. Ini engga perlu pake 's

4. Ini juga ga perlu pake 's

5. Ini banyak banget kata Tareja's, itu maksudnya mau menunjukan apa ya? Tareja's kan artinya itu kepemilikan Tareja, tapi dari kalimatnya engga masuk, hanya dibeberapa kalimat yang memang masuk.

1. Sudah
2. Sudah
3. Sudah
4. Sudah
5. Maaf min. Saya sudah cek ulang, yang menurut saya tidak perlu 's sudah saya ganti, silahkan di koreksi kembali jika masih ada kesalahan.

[$Martixel$]

30 minutes ago, Jeffrey_Philips said:

his father's going to do after he's 18 Years old

Ini ga perlu 's dan Years ga perlu kapital, kata 'school' juga engga perlu kapital jika bukan di awal kalimat/paragraf.

[Jeffrey_Philips]

3 minutes ago, Martixel said:

Ini ga perlu 's dan Years ga perlu kapital, kata 'school' juga engga perlu kapital jika bukan di awal kalimat/paragraf.

Sudah di ganti min

[$Martixel$]

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