Fewdimas Posted March 18, 2022 Posted March 18, 2022 (edited) Melvin_Solomo Australia 12/05/2003, A baby named Melvin Solomon was born. Melvin is the only child of Brian/His father, and Beatrix/Mother. Melvin is of German and Dutch descent, because his father is German and his mother is Dutch, but Melvin was born in Australia. Melvin is an extraordinary child, kind and hardworking, he always helps his parents when they are tired from work, or sick. Melvin always said he wanted to be a doctor, because he wanted to take care of his parents when they were sick, he promised his mother that one day he would become a doctor. Melvin's family was fairly wealthy, and at first his family was happy. One day his parents agreed that Melvin was given a private tutor to be smarter and of course Melvin could get achievements in school. Melvin admits that his teacher is very easy to understand and also very beautiful. One day Melvin's father was caught having an affair with Melvin's tutor, Melvin's heart was broken as well as his mother, because his father had an affair, he was also sad because he loved his own teacher. Melvin saw his mother who was devastated and wanted to commit suicide, but luckily Melvin immediately calmed his mother down. After Melvin's mother and father divorced he decided to follow his father first. Previously Melvin talked to his mother about his plan, his mother agreed even though Melvin lied to his mother about his plan. After how long later, his father went to work abroad first for 1 month. Melvin did not waste the opportunity, and he immediately had an affair with his stepmother. Some time later, his father came home he still didn't know about Melvin's affair with his stepmother, until one day Melvin deliberately cheated on his father, Melvin was scolded and expelled. Melvin went back to his mother's house, because his plan had worked and took care of his mother. One day Melvin asked his mother for permission to go out of town and make his dream come true. In his new city Melvin lives happily, surrounded by many good friends and also he becomes a hard worker. Melvin earned enough money and went home to take his mother on vacation. After the holidays Melvin decided to take care of his mother for a while and went back out again. Melvin is very happy and excited to return to work while waiting for a job vacancy as a doctor. Questions Character Story Pertama: No Durasi bermain di JG:RP: Kurang dari 1 bulan URL Namechange: Account UCP yang saya miliki: Tidak ada Account Forum yang saya miliki: Saya Fewdimas selaku pemilik account UCP dimasjaspier bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Melvin_Solomo) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain. Edited March 19, 2022 by Fewdimas
$Overcast$ Posted March 18, 2022 Posted March 18, 2022 Sebelum melanjutkan ke revisi saya ingin mengajukan beberapa pertanyaan ke kamu. Apakah ini adalah pertama kali kamu membuat Character Story ? (Ya/Tidak) Sudah berapa lama kamu main JG:RP? ( Kurang dari 1 bulan / 1 - 3 bulan / 4 - 6 bulan / 6 bulan - 1 tahun / 1 tahun lebih / 3 tahun lebih / 5 tahun lebih ) Apakah character ini baru kamu buat atau baru melakukan prosess Namechange ? (Buat baru/Namechange) Apakah kamu memiliki account UCP selain yang kamu mainkan saat ini? (Ya/Tidak) Apakah kamu memiliki account Forum selain yang kamu pakai saat ini? (Ya/Tidak) Dimana tempat kamu bermain sekarang? (Di rumah / Di warnet) Harap diperhatikan ketentuan dibawah ini!1. Menggunakan font yang mudah dibaca (Arial, Calibri, atau Tahoma),Font size: 14, dan jangan diberikan atribut berlebihan (Bold, Italic, atau Underline)2. Pastikan format penulisan Justify yaitu rata kanan-kiri. 3. Tidak boleh ada plagiarisme (silahkan cari di internet untuk plagiarism checker, contoh: http://smallseotools.com/plagiarism-checker/ )4. Ejaan, tanda baca, dan grammar harus sesuai dengan standar bahasa yang dipilih (Bahasa Indonesia atau English).5. Character story minimal harus memiliki 300 kata yang dipecah menjadi minimal 3 paragraph. 6. Gunakan huruf kapital sesuai penempatan kata dan juga yang baik dan benar.
Fewdimas Posted March 18, 2022 Author Posted March 18, 2022 1. tidak 2. kurang 1 bulan 3. udah buat 4. tidak 5. tidak 6. dirumah
$Overcast$ Posted March 18, 2022 Posted March 18, 2022 Perhatikan ketentuan yang saya sebutkan di atas. Jarak antara paragraf kamu juga terlalu besar.
$Overcast$ Posted March 18, 2022 Posted March 18, 2022 3 hours ago, sderosmen2 said: Harap diperhatikan ketentuan dibawah ini!1. Menggunakan font yang mudah dibaca (Arial, Calibri, atau Tahoma),Font size: 14, dan jangan diberikan atribut berlebihan (Bold, Italic, atau Underline)2. Pastikan format penulisan Justify yaitu rata kanan-kiri. 3. Tidak boleh ada plagiarisme (silahkan cari di internet untuk plagiarism checker, contoh: http://smallseotools.com/plagiarism-checker/ )4. Ejaan, tanda baca, dan grammar harus sesuai dengan standar bahasa yang dipilih (Bahasa Indonesia atau English).5. Character story minimal harus memiliki 300 kata yang dipecah menjadi minimal 3 paragraph. 6. Gunakan huruf kapital sesuai penempatan kata dan juga yang baik dan benar. 3 hours ago, Fewdimas said: Melvin was scolded and expelled. Melvin went back to his mother's house, because his plan had worked and took care of his mother. One day Melvin gave permission to his mother to go out of town and make his dream come true. Itu contoh jarak yang terlalu besar.
Fewdimas Posted March 18, 2022 Author Posted March 18, 2022 (edited) Australia 12/05/2003, A baby named Melvin Solomon was born. Melvin is the only child of Brian/His father, and Beatrix/Mother. Melvin is of German and Dutch descent, because his father is German and his mother is Dutch, but Melvin was born in Australia. Melvin is an extraordinary child, kind and hardworking, he always helps his parents when they are tired from work, or sick. Melvin always said he wanted to be a doctor, because he wanted to take care of his parents when they were sick, he promised his mother that one day he would become a doctor. Melvin's family was fairly wealthy, and at first his family was happy. One day his parents agreed that Melvin was given a private tutor to be smarter and of course Melvin could get achievements in school. Melvin admits that his teacher is very easy to understand and also very beautiful. One day Melvin's father was caught having an affair with Melvin's tutor, Melvin's heart was broken as well as his mother, because his father had an affair, he was also sad because he loved his own teacher. Melvin saw his mother who was devastated and wanted to commit suicide, but luckily Melvin immediately calmed his mother down. After Melvin's mother and father divorced he decided to follow his father first. Previously Melvin talked to his mother about his plan, his mother agreed even though Melvin lied to his mother about his plan. After how long later, his father went to work abroad first for 1 month. Melvin did not waste the opportunity, and he immediately had an affair with his stepmother. Some time later, his father came home he still didn't know about Melvin's affair with his stepmother, until one day Melvin deliberately cheated on his father, Melvin was scolded and expelled. Melvin went back to his mother's house, because his plan had worked and took care of his mother. One day Melvin asked his mother for permission to go out of town and make his dream come true. In his new city Melvin lives happily, surrounded by many good friends and also he becomes a hard worker. Melvin earned enough money and went home to take his mother on vacation. After the holidays Melvin decided to take care of his mother for a while and went back out again. Melvin is very happy and excited to return to work while waiting for a job vacancy as a doctor. Edited March 19, 2022 by Fewdimas
$Overcast$ Posted March 18, 2022 Posted March 18, 2022 Jangan direply, edit langsung topic pertama kamu. Tekan tombol menu (●●●), lalu edit.
Fewdimas Posted March 19, 2022 Author Posted March 19, 2022 (edited) oke udah Edited March 19, 2022 by Fewdimas
$Overcast$ Posted March 19, 2022 Posted March 19, 2022 18 hours ago, Fewdimas said: Australia 12/05/2003 A baby Berikan koma setelah tanggal 14 hours ago, Fewdimas said: Melvin is of German and Dutch descent 18 hours ago, Fewdimas said: his father is of German descent, and his mother is of Dutch descent Ini maksudnya apa? Mungkin maksud kamu "... is a German and Dutch descent". "is of" sepertinya tidak ada. 18 hours ago, Fewdimas said: agreed that I was Pakai sudut pandang orang ke-3. 18 hours ago, Fewdimas said: cheating on him Cheating on him or his mother? 14 hours ago, Fewdimas said: stepmother, Until Huruf kapitalnya diperhatikan. 18 hours ago, Fewdimas said: Melvin gave permission to his mother Ini kenapa Melvin yang ngasih izin ke ibunya?
Fewdimas Posted March 19, 2022 Author Posted March 19, 2022 udah ku perbaiki, kalau ada salah mohon dikoreksi
$Overcast$ Posted March 19, 2022 Posted March 19, 2022 Kamu mengedit post yang salah. Edit post paling pertama kamu, bukan yang di reply.
$Overcast$ Posted March 20, 2022 Posted March 20, 2022 Jogjagamers Reality Project Helper Team Character Story Dear @Fewdimas, I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to ACCEPT your request. Please read this guide to activate your character story In-Game via our UCP Website. We hope that you may use this character story to further develop your character. Sincerely,@sderosmen2 JG:RP Helper Team
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