$Bold$ Posted February 28, 2022 Posted February 28, 2022 (edited) Ronald_Ortega Ronald Ortega lives in a living hell on earth called a city of Fresnillo in Mexico with only his father and younger sister. His father Sergio is a gambler, drunkard and oftenly harms them. When things went like messed up, his mother Paula couldn't stand the attitude of his father Sergio anymore and left Ronald at 19 and his younger sister Sara which is 2 years younger than him. After Paula's leave, everything that messed up becomes horrible. Every night Sara locked up in her bed by Sergio, abused her. Ronald was very angry to see what's happening, but he didn't have any guts to stop his father. It was a night, a moment when Sergio was abusing Sara in her room, he went insane about to beats and throws Sara out the window. Several neighbors came knocking on the door to see what was going on. Heard a mess in Sara's room, Ronald picked up a wood bat and broke into her room, ran to Sergio and swinged the bat over his face multiple times. That moment, Ronald was beating up Sergio halfway to death until some neighbor stopped him and called the cops. A day after, Ronald sent to a juvenile detention facility for a 8 months allegedly assaulted his father, and Sara was taken care by a foster parent. It was a rough time to Ronald, it's like just moving from one hell to another hell. He often got beaten in there and sleepless, but he tried to resist anything that could make him more in trouble. After 6 months later, when the times come. As soon as Ronald came out of the gate, Sara and her foster parent were already waiting him. Sara was so happy and cried to see Ronald again. Right after Ronald's release, the foster parent asked them to stay along in Los Santos. Their answer was "We love you!". Questions Character Story Pertama: No Durasi bermain di JG:RP: 3 tahun lebih URL Namechange: - Account UCP yang saya miliki: emovisht3 Account Forum yang saya miliki:@Bold Saya Bold selaku pemilik account UCP emovisht3 bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Ronald_Ortega) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain. Edited February 28, 2022 by Bold Revisi
RizkyKazami Posted February 28, 2022 Posted February 28, 2022 Ok, sembari saya mereview serta mengoreksi character story anda, mohon jawab pertanyaan saya di bawah ini: 1. Sudah berapa lama anda bermain JG:RP? 2. Dimana anda bermain JG:RP? 3. Dimana anda bermain JG:RP? 4. Apakah kamu memiliki account UCP selain yang kamu mainkan saat ini? (Ya/Tidak) 5. Apakah kamu memiliki account Forum selain yang kamu pakai saat ini? (Ya/Tidak) 6. Baru pertama kali membuat character story? 7. Level berapa character anda ini?
$Bold$ Posted February 28, 2022 Author Posted February 28, 2022 Terima kasih admin. 2 minutes ago, RizkyKazami said: 1. Sudah berapa lama anda bermain JG:RP? 2. Dimana anda bermain JG:RP? 3. Dimana anda bermain JG:RP? 4. Apakah kamu memiliki account UCP selain yang kamu mainkan saat ini? (Ya/Tidak) 5. Apakah kamu memiliki account Forum selain yang kamu pakai saat ini? (Ya/Tidak) 6. Baru pertama kali membuat character story? 7. Level berapa character anda ini? Jawaban sbb : 1. Bergabung dengan JGRP sekitar tahun 2014, sempat tidak main untuk waktu yang lama. Tapi saya anggap 3 tahun lebih. 2. Di rumah. 3. Di rumah. 4. Tidak. 5. Tidak. 6. Tidak. 7. Level 3.
RizkyKazami Posted February 28, 2022 Posted February 28, 2022 Revisi: Di awal kalimat setiap paragraf kasih spasi ya 8-10 spasi ya. Ronald Ortega, (Hapus koma (,) ). Every single night jadi Every night. Ubah: 3 hours ago, Bold said: Some of the neighbour came by knocking the door to see what happened. Jadi: Several neighbors came knocking on the door to see what was going on. broke in to her room = broke into her room. moving from a hell = moving from one hell to another hell. to death until some neighbour = neighbor Ubah: 4 hours ago, Bold said: Their answer were "We love you!" = Their answer was "We love you!"
RizkyKazami Posted February 28, 2022 Posted February 28, 2022 Jogjagamers Reality Project Helper Team Character Story Dear @Bold, I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to ACCEPT your request. Please read this guide to activate your character story In-Game via our UCP Website. We hope that you may use this character story to further develop your character. Sincerely,@RizkyKazami JG:RP Helper Team
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