Dewa Njuri Posted August 28, 2021 Posted August 28, 2021 (edited) Nikolai Rostislav Nikolai Vryzc Rostislav was born on October 30, 1994, in Kiev, Russia, the first of three children of Russian Mobster, Mikael Andreij Rostislav. His mother, Anna Rostislav, was an Agent from International Intelegent Departement, she quits from her job and try to keep her sons away from their father. Mikael, who worked as Mafia leader, was a phsycopath who train his sons to kill and torture his enemy. The second son, Vladimir Rostislav, reportedly died from such brutal revenge from his father's enemy. Mikael and Anna Rostislav was death in July, 2006, in their own house because robbery, and their last child reported missing until now. Nikolai growing up with cold blooded in his vein, he has no regret when he kill or tortue his target. He live as an assassin since he was 14 years old. His criminal activities included robbery, hijackings and selling drugs, but murder was his speciality. He earned Mafia respect at the 18 years old by efficiently and unquestioningly killing a random man selected for him on the public space. He became the indispensable hitman. One of his target was Michael Romanovski, an active agent from International Intelegent Departement, and his mother's former partner. Michael know about Nikolai and his family from Anna, and he try to convince Nikolai to trust him, that Nikolai can move away from his life as an assassin without any risk and nobody would hunt him. Nikolai really confused and try to realized that he lives in pathway where his mother doesn't want. He really loves his mother, more than he loves himself. Michael Romanovski, who known as Expert Recruiter, saw a great opportunity and talent in Nikolai. So he decided to train and treat Nikolai himself, he has strong intuition that Nikolai would be great Intelegent or detective in the future. Nikolai get sharp and smart with Michael treatment, he never failed his test. Michael Romanovski die at 2020 when he was on duty, nobody know where is his body burried. Now, Nikolai must life and continue his live as a normal man, he is waiting for an opportunity to join Intelegent Agency or Police Departement, or he can join Big Faction to fulfill his blood thristy. Questions Character Story Pertama: Ya Durasi bermain di JG:RP: Kurang dari 1 bulan URL Namechange: Account UCP yang saya miliki: Tidak ada Account Forum yang saya miliki: Saya Dewa Njuri selaku pemilik account UCP DewaNjuriGaming bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Nikolai Rostislav) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain. Edited August 30, 2021 by Dewa Njuri Repairing words
$Folium$ Posted August 28, 2021 Posted August 28, 2021 Halo, saya Folium yang akan memeriksa Character Story kamu. Sebelumnya, saya ingin bertanya tentang beberapa hal. Apakah character yang kamu gunakan sudah mencapai level 3? Apakah kamu sudah memastikan bahwa Character Story kamu ini sudah berjumlah 300 kata? Sebutkan semua UCP yang kamu punya sejujur-jujurnya! Apakah kamu sudah baca ketentuan dari pembuatan Character Story dan siap menerima konsekuensinya jika melanggar? Jangan bump Character Story kamu, cukup tunggu, periksa kembali, dan cek ulang kata-kata pada Character Stories yang sudah kamu buat.
Dewa Njuri Posted August 28, 2021 Author Posted August 28, 2021 1. Character sudah level 3. 2. Jumlahnya 300 kata lebih. 3. Saya player baru dan cuma mempunyai 1 UCP. 4. Saya sudah baca dan siap dengan konsekuensinya.
$Folium$ Posted August 28, 2021 Posted August 28, 2021 Tolong tambahkan dulu foto character pada Character Story kamu. Jangan gunakan foto dari in-game, coba searching di Google aja ya. Fotonya jangan terlalu besar, juga jangan terlalu kecil. posisikan fotonya persis di tengah-tengah.
$Folium$ Posted August 28, 2021 Posted August 28, 2021 Fotonya tolong dipindahkan ke atas, sebelum paragraf pertama yang kamu buat, cek penempatan foto character pada Character Story yang lain. Posisinya juga, tolong pindahkan ke tengah, untuk ukurannya, tolong dikecilkan. Quote Nikolai Vryzc Rostislav was born on October 30, 1994, in Kiev, Russia, the first of three children of Russian Mobster Mikael Andreij Rostislav. His mother, Anna Rostislav, was an Agent from International Intelegent Departement, she quit her job and try to keep her sons away from their father. Mikael, who worked as Mafia leader, was a phsycopath who train his sons to kill and torture his enemy. The second son, Vladimir Rostislav, reportedly died from such brutal revenge from his father's enemy. Mikael and Anna Rostislav was death in July, 2006, in their own house because robbery, and their last child reported missing until now. Perhatikan penulisan yang ada di atas, penulisan tersebut adalah penulisan yang masih salah. Perhatikan perbaikan yang benar di bawah ini. Quote Nikolai Vryzc Rostislav was born on October 30, 1994, in Kiev, Russia, the first of three children of Russian Mobster Mikael Andreij Rostislav. His mother, Anna Rostislav, was an Agent from International Intelegent Departement, she quit her job and try to keep her sons away from their father. Mikael, who worked as Mafia leader, was a phsycopath who train his sons to kill and torture his enemy. The second son, Vladimir Rostislav, reportedly died from such brutal revenge from his father's enemy. Mikael and Anna Rostislav was death in July, 2006, in their own house because robbery, and their last child reported missing until now. Berikan spasi pada setiap awal kalimat yang ada di Character Story kamu, seperti yang saya contohkan di atas. Aplikasikan juga format Justify ( Rata Kanan-Kiri ) pada seluruh paragaraf yang ada di Character Story kamu sehingga penulisan kamu terlihat lebih rapi dan terstruktur. Klik pada format yang paling kanan untuk mengaplikasikan format tersebut.
Dewa Njuri Posted August 29, 2021 Author Posted August 29, 2021 18 jam yang lalu, Folium said: Fotonya tolong dipindahkan ke atas, sebelum paragraf pertama yang kamu buat, cek penempatan foto character pada Character Story yang lain. Posisinya juga, tolong pindahkan ke tengah, untuk ukurannya, tolong dikecilkan. Perhatikan penulisan yang ada di atas, penulisan tersebut adalah penulisan yang masih salah. Perhatikan perbaikan yang benar di bawah ini. Berikan spasi pada setiap awal kalimat yang ada di Character Story kamu, seperti yang saya contohkan di atas. Aplikasikan juga format Justify ( Rata Kanan-Kiri ) pada seluruh paragaraf yang ada di Character Story kamu sehingga penulisan kamu terlihat lebih rapi dan terstruktur. Klik pada format yang paling kanan untuk mengaplikasikan format tersebut. Sudah.
$Folium$ Posted August 30, 2021 Posted August 30, 2021 On 8/28/2021 at 1:07 PM, Dewa Njuri said: children of Russian Mobster Mikael Andreij Rostislav Tambahkan tanda koma setelah kata "Mobster". On 8/28/2021 at 1:07 PM, Dewa Njuri said: she quit her job and Tolong diubah menjadi "she quits from her job and". On 8/28/2021 at 1:07 PM, Dewa Njuri said: keep her sons Harusnya "son". On 8/28/2021 at 1:07 PM, Dewa Njuri said: criminal Perbaiki font size dan font stylenya, tolong disamakan.
Dewa Njuri Posted August 30, 2021 Author Posted August 30, 2021 3 jam yang lalu, Folium said: Tambahkan tanda koma setelah kata "Mobster". Tolong diubah menjadi "she quits from her job and". Harusnya "son". Perbaiki font size dan font stylenya, tolong disamakan. 1. Sudah. 2. Sudah. 3. Sons (Majemuk/Jamak), karena anak Anna Rostislav ada 3 Orang, dan ia ingin menjauhkan ketiganya dari ayahnya. 4. Font size : 14, Font Style : Arial. Sudah.
$Folium$ Posted August 30, 2021 Posted August 30, 2021 On 8/28/2021 at 1:07 PM, Dewa Njuri said: OR Tidak memerlukan huruf kapital. On 8/28/2021 at 1:07 PM, Dewa Njuri said: he wait an opportunity Ubah menjadi "he is waiting for an opportunity".
Dewa Njuri Posted August 30, 2021 Author Posted August 30, 2021 1 jam yang lalu, Folium said: Tidak memerlukan huruf kapital. Ubah menjadi "he is waiting for an opportunity". Done.
$Folium$ Posted August 30, 2021 Posted August 30, 2021 On 8/28/2021 at 1:07 PM, Dewa Njuri said: convice Seharusnya "convince", bukan "convice". On 8/28/2021 at 1:07 PM, Dewa Njuri said: forte Ubah menjadi "speciality". On 8/28/2021 at 1:07 PM, Dewa Njuri said: at age 18 Ubah menjadi "at the 18 years old".
Dewa Njuri Posted August 30, 2021 Author Posted August 30, 2021 56 minutes ago, Folium said: Seharusnya "convince", bukan "convice". Ubah menjadi "speciality". Ubah menjadi "at the 18 years old". Done.
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