Roxzy Posted May 18, 2021 Posted May 18, 2021 (edited) Jamaiga_Deek Jamaiga Deek was born in USA, Washington DC living in Las Venturas with his parents. They live in a rented house and the surrounding area is the home of excessive criminals. He started using marijuana at the age of 12 secretly using it without the knowledge of his parents and he lives like a normal child. At the age of 14, he tried heroin for the first time. Addictive, he used it in middle school until he left high school. Her parents agreed to move to San Fierro for a new job and for her middle school, Jamaiga moved to Doherty in central San Fierro, so she made new friends sooner than anyone. He started looking for new sources of marijuana he could find, at first he didn't have heroin or marijuana, so he tried cutting heroin and tried to get just marijuana. because it was easier and quicker to find, he could find a source to sell which was a small group of gangs in the neighborhood, he spent all his money on it. During his stay in San Fierro. He learns a lot, and he decided to exchange marijuana for less money and buy more marijuana. He lives like this until he was 16 years old. He got into a fight with other kids in high school, causing him to be suspended and having to stay home for two weeks before he returned to school. He is in love with a girl named Alisa, but he doesn't love Jamaiga at all. Until one day he decided to come and tell him. But instead he was rejected with shame, so he didn't love anyone anymore. She posted on her Facebook page "Sayonara". He never lived the street life, he just talked and traded but never really lived that way, but not long after Jamaiga turned 17. He brought marijuana to middle school again. This time he retired from high school again because his parents lost their job and the income was not enough to use. So he had to moved to Los Santos. Three month ago Jamaiga with his parents moved to Los Santos, his parents rented a lease in the Bahamas, Jefferson. When Jamaiga was playing around his house, he saw people gathered by the side of the road. Then someone approach Jamaiga and invite Jamaiga to meet him. That person is Dre, Dre is a person who likes to hangout on those streets. Dre introduced to all his friends who like to hangout on the street, Crenshaw Avenue. At that time Jamaiga was often hanging out in Crenshaw, near the Bahamas. Both of his parents were familiar with Dre's kindness, often taking Jamaiga around Crenshaw Street. Jamaiga met with Chiga, Khilla, East, JK and others. Jamaiga was shocked when he heard that Chiga was Khilla's older brother who had been hanging out in Crenshaw with JK since the day one. Jamaiga asked about Marijuana and Cocaine, Chiga and Khilla are drug dealers, they have been selling hundreds or even thousands of marijuana every week to all corners of Los Santos, Jamaiga was interested with that. Dre tells his story to Chiga and Khilla, they both think Jamaiga is a child who likes to spy on, but Jamaiga is different, he likes their job very much, Chiga and Khilla accept Jamaiga as part of them, work as a drug dealer. Jamaiga, who now knows many things, about rifles, Glock, AK, Shotgun and others. Questions Tujuan membuat character story: membuka fitur yang dibutuhkan character story Account UCP yang saya miliki: Roxzy Account Forum yang saya miliki:Roxzy Berapa lama saya sudah main di JGRP: Kurang dari 1 bulan Saya biasa main JGRP di: Hanya di rumah Saya Roxzy selaku pemilik account UCP Roxzy bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Jamaiga_Deek) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain. Edited May 24, 2021 by Roxzy 1
$SilumanUlar$ Posted May 19, 2021 Posted May 19, 2021 Hello, before I respond to your Character Story, please answer the questions below honestly: What is the current level of your character? Is your UCP synchronous / appropriate? so that the Character Story process can run smoothly Do you have more than one UCP? Make sure you understand the rules before creating Character Story, have you read it? Will you be banned from a permanent account if you are caught Copy-Paste Character Story?
Roxzy Posted May 19, 2021 Author Posted May 19, 2021 (edited) 14 hours ago, GulaGula said: Hello, before I respond to your Character Story, please answer the questions below honestly: What is the current level of your character? Is your UCP synchronous / appropriate? so that the Character Story process can run smoothly Do you have more than one UCP? Make sure you understand the rules before creating Character Story, have you read it? Will you be banned from a permanent account if you are caught Copy-Paste Character Story? 1.What is the current level of your character? answer : 3 2.Is your UCP synchronous / appropriate? so that the Character Story process can run smoothly answer : Yes 3.Do you have more than one UCP? answer : No 4.Make sure you understand the rules before creating Character Story, have you read it? answer : Yes sir , I'm done. 5.Will you be banned from a permanent account if you are caught Copy-Paste Character Story? answer : Sure Edited May 19, 2021 by Roxzy
$SilumanUlar$ Posted May 20, 2021 Posted May 20, 2021 To @Roxzy I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to PENDING your request. Reasoning for said denial is listed below: Use the format available in this thread. Use a font that is easy to read (Arial,Calibri or Tahoma), Font size : 14 and don't give excessive attributes (Bold, Italic or Underline) marijuana. becuase If this is a new sentence, it should start with a capital letter. punctuation. to many. Please check. If you mean "excessively", then write too. he retire. The verb should probably end in "-s", e.g.: she works here, he does more than his share. Another possibility would be to use a past form, e.g.: She wrote me a letter. Remove all capslock on "FUCK BITCH" words. again His. The second word should probably begin with a small letter (unless this is a title). If you are starting a new sentence, then you need to add a period. use So. This word should not be capitalized unless it is a name or part of a title. I wish you the best of luck in the future. Sincerely,@GulaGula JG:RP Staff Team
Roxzy Posted May 20, 2021 Author Posted May 20, 2021 4 hours ago, GulaGula said: To @Roxzy I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to PENDING your request. Reasoning for said denial is listed below: Use the format available in this thread. Use a font that is easy to read (Arial,Calibri or Tahoma), Font size : 14 and don't give excessive attributes (Bold, Italic or Underline) marijuana. becuase If this is a new sentence, it should start with a capital letter. punctuation. to many. Please check. If you mean "excessively", then write too. he retire. The verb should probably end in "-s", e.g.: she works here, he does more than his share. Another possibility would be to use a past form, e.g.: She wrote me a letter. Remove all capslock on "FUCK BITCH" words. again His. The second word should probably begin with a small letter (unless this is a title). If you are starting a new sentence, then you need to add a period. use So. This word should not be capitalized unless it is a name or part of a title. I wish you the best of luck in the future. Sincerely,@GulaGula JG:RP Staff Team Edited
$SilumanUlar$ Posted May 20, 2021 Posted May 20, 2021 Fix: Fix the word order: Spoiler On 5/19/2021 at 5:16 AM, Roxzy said: Jamaiga Deek, born in 2002, lives in Las Venturas to his father and mother. They lived in a rented house and the surrounding area was home excessively villains. He started using Marijuana at the age of 12 and secretly used it without his parents' knowledge, and he lives like a normal kid. At age 14, he tried heroin for the first time. Made him addicted, he used it in high school until he left High school. His parents agreed to move the house to San Fierro for a new job and for his high school , Jamaiga moved to Doherty in the center of San Fierro, so he made friends faster than anyone else. He began to find new sources of marijuana that he could find, at first he didn't have heroin or marijuana, so he tried cutting heroin and trying to get just marijuana. becuase It was easier and faster to find, he was able to find a source for sale that is a small group of gangs in the neighborhood he spent all his money on it. CHANGE IT TO: Jamaiga Deek, born in 2002, lives in Las Venturas to his father and mother. They lived in a rented house and the surrounding area was home excessively villains. He started using Marijuana at the age of 12 and secretly used it without his parents' knowledge, and he lives like a normal kid. At age 14, he tried heroin for the first time. Made him addicted, he used it in high school until he left High school. His parents agreed to move the house to San Fierro for a new job and for his high school , Jamaiga moved to Doherty in the center of San Fierro, so he made friends faster than anyone else. He began to find new sources of marijuana that he could find, at first he didn't have heroin or marijuana, so he tried cutting heroin and trying to get just marijuana. becuase It was easier and faster to find, he was able to find a source for sale that is a small group of gangs in the neighborhood he spent all his money on it. Don't use capital letter on marijuana, if this is not a new sentence
Roxzy Posted May 20, 2021 Author Posted May 20, 2021 11 minutes ago, GulaGula said: Fix: Fix the word order: Reveal hidden contents Don't use capital letter on marijuana, if this is not a new sentence Yes sir done
$SilumanUlar$ Posted May 21, 2021 Posted May 21, 2021 Fix: Fix the word bellow, please focus on your problem: Spoiler On 5/19/2021 at 5:16 AM, Roxzy said: Jamaiga Deek, born in 2002, lives in Las Venturas to his father and mother. They lived in a rented house and the surrounding area was home excessively villains. He started using Marijuana at the age of 12 and secretly used it without his parents' knowledge, and he lives like a normal kid. At age 14, he tried heroin for the first time. Made him addicted, he used it in high school until he left High school. His parents agreed to move the house to San Fierro for a new job and for his high school , Jamaiga moved to Doherty in the center of San Fierro, so he made friends faster than anyone else. He began to find new sources of marijuana that he could find, at first he didn't have heroin or marijuana, so he tried cutting heroin and trying to get just marijuana. becuase It was easier and faster to find, he was able to find a source for sale that is a small group of gangs in the neighborhood he spent all his money on it. CHANGE IT TO: Jamaiga Deek, born in 2002, lives in Las Venturas to his father and mother. They lived in a rented house and the surrounding area was home excessively villains. He started using Marijuana at the age of 12 and secretly used it without his parents' knowledge, and he lives like a normal kid. At age 14, he tried heroin for the first time. Made him addicted, he used it in high school until he left High school. His parents agreed to move the house to San Fierro for a new job and for his high school , Jamaiga moved to Doherty in the center of San Fierro, so he made friends faster than anyone else. He began to find new sources of marijuana that he could find, at first he didn't have heroin or marijuana, so he tried cutting heroin and trying to get just marijuana. becuase It was easier and faster to find, he was able to find a source for sale that is a small group of gangs in the neighborhood he spent all his money on it. Don't use capital letter on marijuana, if this is not a new sentence. Still incorrect check it and focus.
Roxzy Posted May 21, 2021 Author Posted May 21, 2021 1 hour ago, GulaGula said: Fix: Fix the word bellow, please focus on your problem: Hide contents Don't use capital letter on marijuana, if this is not a new sentence. Still incorrect check it and focus. Now check it will be finally !
$SilumanUlar$ Posted May 22, 2021 Posted May 22, 2021 Fix: Fix the structure words. Look carefully about the mistake on your Character Story: Spoiler On 5/19/2021 at 5:16 AM, Roxzy said: Jamaiga Deek, born in 2002, lives in Las Venturas to his father and mother. They lived in a rented house and the surrounding area was home excessively villains. He started using Marijuana at the age of 12 and secretly used it without his parents' knowledge, and he lives like a normal kid. At age 14, he tried heroin for the first time. Made him addicted, he used it in high school until he left High school. His parents agreed to move the house to San Fierro for a new job and for his high school , Jamaiga moved to Doherty in the center of San Fierro, so he made friends faster than anyone else. He began to find new sources of marijuana that he could find, at first he didn't have heroin or marijuana, so he tried cutting heroin and trying to get just marijuana. becuase It was easier and faster to find, he was able to find a source for sale that is a small group of gangs in the neighborhood he spent all his money on it. CHANGE IT TO: Jamaiga Deek, born in 2002, lives in Las Venturas to his father and mother. They lived in a rented house and the surrounding area was home excessively villains. He started using Marijuana at the age of 12 and secretly used it without his parents' knowledge, and he lives like a normal kid. At age 14, he tried heroin for the first time. Made him addicted, he used it in high school until he left High school. His parents agreed to move the house to San Fierro for a new job and for his high school , Jamaiga moved to Doherty in the center of San Fierro, so he made friends faster than anyone else. He began to find new sources of marijuana that he could find, at first he didn't have heroin or marijuana, so he tried cutting heroin and trying to get just marijuana. becuase It was easier and faster to find, he was able to find a source for sale that is a small group of gangs in the neighborhood he spent all his money on it.
$SilumanUlar$ Posted May 22, 2021 Posted May 22, 2021 Fix: Don't use text color on your Character Story, remove it. Use the format available in this thread. Use a font that is easy to read (Arial,Calibri or Tahoma) on paragraph one.
Roxzy Posted May 24, 2021 Author Posted May 24, 2021 On 5/22/2021 at 6:46 PM, GulaGula said: Fix: Don't use text color on your Character Story, remove it. Use the format available in this thread. Use a font that is easy to read (Arial,Calibri or Tahoma) on paragraph one. Edited, adding the new story on the last paragraph, removed all "CAPSLOCK" on the story. Please check again, thankyou.
$SilumanUlar$ Posted May 24, 2021 Posted May 24, 2021 2 hours ago, Roxzy said: Edited, adding the new story on the last paragraph, removed all "CAPSLOCK" on the story. Please check again, thankyou. Use the format available in this thread. Use a font that is easy to read (Arial,Calibri or Tahoma) on paragraph one. If you don't understand about the problem, tell to me.
Roxzy Posted May 24, 2021 Author Posted May 24, 2021 1 hour ago, GulaGula said: Use the format available in this thread. Use a font that is easy to read (Arial,Calibri or Tahoma) on paragraph one. If you don't understand about the problem, tell to me. Sorry, its a default font i used. I was picked one of that font.
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