pending Dalbaley_Wallace [Badman2309]

[Salty Blob]

Dalbaley_Wallace

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     Dalbaley Wallace was born in 18 Desember 1986 in Ganton, Los Santos. Her mother gave birth to him when his father were in the state of bad economy and enduring a lot of problems at that time however their parents had been struggling to bring his only child up at all costs, as time went on, he had turned into an average teenager, hoping his only child would get a better life in the future his parents enrolled him in one of decent schools in Los Santos, the first day of being a student in the elementary school, some of students had recognized him and called him Dalby apparently, because of his kind of introverted personality, he's not good at socializing with society and he felt ashamed of his appearances considering that he had been being raised by underprivileged family and most of his schoolmates were living with luxury.

 

     One time, he couldn't take it anymore with his miserable life, wanting to be loaded in a dirty way, he decided to commit a burglar by himself, In the middle of the night, he snuck out of his room through the window without his parents' knowledge and brought his equipments out with him to commit a burglar, after a while as he arrived in the land of the marked house, without observing the surroundings he right away broke into the house with senses of desperation and recklessness, it turns out, there was a policeman patrolling around the neighborhood and he realized something suspicious came up, from a distance the police officer noticed Dalbaley burglarizing the house and he immediately came after him and caught him and as a result, he was being detained for 5 years after comitting a burglary and ended up in the jail, as Dalbaley's parents knew his only child ended up in the jail at the age of 16 they were disappointed in him and gave up on him, his parents went home with disappointment after his only child let them down, when he was being detained in the jail, he owned up to comitting a burglar while he was being interrogated. Throughout his punishment in the jail, He came to his consciousness and capitalized on the situation by developing self-improvement within himself.

 

     5 Years went by, He was released from the jail but he had no particular purpose to live and one day he got back to his parents' house hopefully he still could live off his parents and lean on them but they had disowned him and he ended up staying in a filthy shelter under the bridge around Idlewood, day by day, he had been just loitering around the city and spending his life being a homeless for several years as he had been straightening himself out. Spending time as usual, He eventually had snapped out of it and had a desire to start working as a taxi driver in San Andreas. In the current time, he has been financially independent as a taxi driver and he can get by with his life while still developing his self-improvement with his new-self.

 

 

 

 

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Questions

Tujuan membuat character story:
Ingin beroleplay dengan nyaman

 

Account UCP yang saya miliki:
Badman2309

 

Account Forum yang saya miliki:
Cyanide00
Salty Blob

 

Berapa lama saya sudah main di JGRP:
1 - 2 tahun

 

Saya biasa main JGRP di:
Hanya di warnet

 

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Saya Salty Blob selaku pemilik account UCP Badman2309 bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Dalbaley_Wallace) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain.

[BADRI]

Halo brader.. @Salty Blob

Saya mengecek Character Stories kamu, Silahkan jawab pertanyaan dibawah.

 

1. Sebutkan berapa UCP yang kamu miliki.

2. Character yang kamu mainkan ini level berapa ?

3. Apakah CS yang kamu buat sudah 300 kata ?

4. Apakah CS yang kamu ini hasil dari kamu sendiri atau meng-Copy CS milik orang lain?

5. Apakah nama Character kamu dan nama UCP kamu sudah benar? (biasanya, kalo salah di antara kedua tersebut, pas di masukin CS nya ke UCP itu suka ga bisa, jadi tolong pastikan kembali Nama Character dan nama UCP nya benar.)

6. Kamu main dimana? Rumah apa main di Warnet?

 

Note:
Selagi dalam pemeriksaan, cobalah kamu periksa kembali Character Story kamu, siapa tahu saja ada kesalahan disana, jika ada kesalahan maka perbaikilah dan kalo belum di respon CS nya, mohon bersabar ya kakak, pasti di respon kok.

[Salty Blob]

1. Dengan jujur, saya hanya mempunyai satu UCP pada saat ini, bila anda menyadari ada UCP lain, itu kemungkinan milik saya yang sudah terlupakan atau milik teman saya, dikarenakan saya bermain di warnet.
2. Karakter Dalbaley Wallace level 4.
3. Tentunya, saya sudah mengecek kata dari cerita karakter Dalbaley Wallace.
4. Tentu tidak, saya menghabiskan waktu dua jam kurang lebih untuk bepikir membuat cerita karakter yang logis dan relatif pada karakter saya.
5. Ya, sudah benar
6. Saya selalu bermain di warnet.

[BADRI]

@Salty Blob

Perbaiki kembali:

1. Photo nya terlalu besar gambar nya, silahkan di kecilkan lagi lalu tepatkan di tengah-tengah photo nya.
2. Perhatikan kembali penggunaan kata kata nya, titik koma nya, huruf besar kecil nya, dan gunakan bahasa yang BAKU.
3. Gunakan rata kanan kiri, bukan rata tengah ataupun bukan rata kiri. (Rata Kanan Kiri: )
4. Berikan 5 atau 10 SPACE di setiap awal paragraph nya, lalu sesuaikan dengan paragraph lain nya.
5. Tepatkanlah KOMA dimana semestinya di tepatkan, jika kalimat tersebut masih bisa digunakan KOMA, makan gunakan lah KOMA, jika kalimat tersebut harus di beri TITIK, maka gunakan lah TITIK. jangan terlalu banyak KOMA maupun TITIK dalam Cerita Character Story kamu.

[Salty Blob]

15 jam yang lalu, mariorianto28 said:

@Salty Blob

Perbaiki kembali:

1. Photo nya terlalu besar gambar nya, silahkan di kecilkan lagi lalu tepatkan di tengah-tengah photo nya.
2. Perhatikan kembali penggunaan kata kata nya, titik koma nya, huruf besar kecil nya, dan gunakan bahasa yang BAKU.
3. Gunakan rata kanan kiri, bukan rata tengah ataupun bukan rata kiri. (Rata Kanan Kiri: )
4. Berikan 5 atau 10 SPACE di setiap awal paragraph nya, lalu sesuaikan dengan paragraph lain nya.
5. Tepatkanlah KOMA dimana semestinya di tepatkan, jika kalimat tersebut masih bisa digunakan KOMA, makan gunakan lah KOMA, jika kalimat tersebut harus di beri TITIK, maka gunakan lah TITIK. jangan terlalu banyak KOMA maupun TITIK dalam Cerita Character Story kamu.

Sudah saya perbaiki pak, apabila ada kesalahan grammar lain saya berharap anda bisa menekankannya agar saya bisa perbaiki dengan segera.

[BADRI]

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To @Salty Blob

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to APPROVE your request. Please read the following guide to activate your link your store to your In-Game account:

 

Sincerely,

@mariorianto28
JG:RP Staff Team.