pending Edgardo Melgar [Zhal]

[stawlsr]

Edgardo Melgar

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          Edgardo Melgar was born in Tequila, Jalisco, Mexico. He was born healthy, weighing 3Kg. In his native place people call him Edgar or Ado, Edgar is the 3rd of 4 children named Edmundo, Julio, and Doria as the last daughter. He's strict, angry, and coarse. Which isn't out of the ordinary for someone with his troubled past. He was born and grew up in a middle-class family in a large town, he lived out of trouble until he was about 14 years old. In short of the story, Edgar entered his teenage years, where things that might be very foreign to him would be used as lessons for his daily life. Stepping on adolescence, age 16 to be precise. He lives his life like a teenager as usual, but his daily life is very different from the other kids.

 

          If usually, 16-year-olds kids play soccer, hang out with their friends, or doing some group study. In contrast to Edgar, he is just gloomy in his house lamenting his parents who quarrel almost every day. Not strange to him, he has financial problems, where people get what they want with their Benjamins, but not with Edgar, he has to work on the side like an adult looking for an income. Doing school fights, naughty kids' activities, bullying, Edgar has been through it all. Not after long, Edgar's parents divorced and Edgar was moved to his grandmother's house, at the age of 18 he left his home country and migrated to Los Santos.

 

          His activities were not much different from where he came from, he had several fights with people he didn't know. Until one day there is someone who "might" take revenge for Edgar's treatment of people he does not know. Someone tried to stab Edgar's body but Edgar swiftly dodged it, betting his right hand was hit by a stab wound that almost pierced his palm. Eventually, Edgar became a left-handed person, where he did all his activities with the priority of the left hand. One day he was walking around his grandmother's house, in Los Flores, he met some of his own race, as a result, a fight broke out and Edgar entered one of the people's projects in Los Flores Apartments near where he lived. Until now, Edgar always comes to the apartment, whether there is the task or not, Edgar has dropped out of school.

 

 

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Account UCP yang saya miliki:
Zhal

 

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Berapa lama saya sudah main di JGRP:
Kurang dari 1 bulan

 

Saya biasa main JGRP di:
Hanya di rumah

 

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Saya stawlsr selaku pemilik account UCP Zhal bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Edgardo Melgar) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain.

Edited April 22, 2021 by stawlsr
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Saya deananugerah yang akan mengoreksi thread Character Stories anda, selagi saya mengoreksi Character Story anda akan ada beberapa hal yang akan saya tanyakan kepada anda. Silahkan dijawab beberapa pertanyaan dibawah ini:

1. Berapa UCP yang anda miliki?
2. Apakah anda memiliki UCP yang lain?
3. Level berapa karakter anda saat ini?
4. Apakah Character Stories yang anda buat sudah 300 kata?
5. Anda biasa bermain dimana, di rumah atau di warnet?

Harap perhatikan petunjuk dibawah ini!

1. Gunakan font yang mudah dibaca (Arial, Calibri, atau Tahoma),Font size: 14, dan jangan diberikan atribut berlebihan (Bold, Italic, atau Underline)
2. Pastikan format penulisan Justify yaitu rata kanan-kiri.
3. Berikan sekitar 5 sampai 10 spasi pada setiap awal paragraf. 
4. Pastikan anda sudah menggunakan formulir untuk character stories.
5. Character story minimal harus memiliki 300 kata yang dipecah menjadi minimal 3 paragraph.
6. Ejaan, tanda baca, dan grammar harus sesuai dengan standard bahasa yang dipilih (Bahasa Indonesia atau English).
7. Tidak boleh ada plagiarisme (silahkan cari di internet untuk plagiarism checker, contoh: http://smallseotools.com/plagiarism-checker/ )

[stawlsr]

2 minutes ago, deananugerah said:

Saya deananugerah yang akan mengoreksi thread Character Stories anda, selagi saya mengoreksi Character Story anda akan ada beberapa hal yang akan saya tanyakan kepada anda. Silahkan dijawab beberapa pertanyaan dibawah ini:

1. Berapa UCP yang anda miliki?
2. Apakah anda memiliki UCP yang lain?
3. Level berapa karakter anda saat ini?
4. Apakah Character Stories yang anda buat sudah 300 kata?
5. Anda biasa bermain dimana, di rumah atau di warnet?

 

Selamat malam, saya akan menjawab beberapa pertanyaan dari admin.

1. Hanya 1 UCP.
2. Punya, dan sudah di banned ketika membuat character story sebelum ini.
3. Level 3.
4. Saya sudah mengecek berkali-kali dan saya yakin Character Story yang saya buat sudah 300 kata.
5. Bermain di rumah, dengan komputer pribadi.

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To @stawlsr

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to PENDING your request.

Reasoning for said denial is listed below:

1. Tambahkan foto karakter pada CS kamu. 
2. Berikan format paragraf Justify atau rata kiri-kanan.

I wish you the best of luck in the future.

Sincerely,

@deananugerah
JG:RP Staff Team

[stawlsr]

Edited!

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Perkecil sedikit ukuran fotonya dan taruh di tengah dengan format centre. 

[stawlsr]

5 hours ago, deananugerah said:

Perkecil sedikit ukuran fotonya dan taruh di tengah dengan format centre. 

Done

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To @stawlsr

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to APPROVE your request. Please read the following guide to activate your link your store to your In-Game account:

 

Sincerely,

@deananugerah
JG:RP Staff Team.