pending Florentino_Alfredo [joepramudio]

[joepramudio]

Florentino_Alfredo

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  Florentino Alfredo Williams, born 1990, was a kid growing up in Sicily, Italy from a wealthy family of which his father, half-American Donald Williams was a respected consigliere of the Sicilian Mafia. He was well educated, graduated as a bachelor of psychology from the University of Italy intending to be a clinical psychologist for Italian war veterans. Not long after his graduation, his father was murdered by a local rival gangster who wanted a bargaining power towards the Sicilian Mafia boss, leaving Alfredo’s mother to commit suicide not long after. Before doing so, she left a note for her son, saying that “Find Don’s little Ty, as you are his little kin, at the land of opportunities.” Angered by his parents’ death, Alfredo assassinated the rival gangster during a theatre show and went on the run from his enforcers.

 

  Not long after hiding, Alfredo found himself in the harbour docks of Italy, sneaking himself and his carried things to the ship heading for the City of Los Santos, San Andreas. As he remembers his mother’s last words, he then committed himself to solve the mystery of this “lost kin” of his. Arriving in Los Santos, he then explores his new life; adapting to the American culture and language, seeking out jobs and shelter to survive. He started out fishing, doing truck jobs, and helping out mutual colleagues of his father to for money in return.

 

  Alfredo was shocked to find out that the “lost kin” his mother meant was Tyrone Williams, an SAPD Detective from a word-to-word information by his friend who is deep undercover as an intel for the police department. Alfredo sets out to meet with Tyrone, and hopes to develop a life together in Los Santos, and figure out how could he be his brother in the first place.

 

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Questions

Tujuan membuat character story:
Untuk menyelesaikan keperluan CS dan juga mendapatkan privilege accepted-CS story characater in SAMP.

 

Account UCP yang saya miliki:
joepramudio

 

Account Forum yang saya miliki:
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Berapa lama saya sudah main di JGRP:
Kurang dari 1 bulan

 

Saya biasa main JGRP di:
Lainnya

 

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Saya joepramudio selaku pemilik account UCP joepramudio bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Florentino_Alfredo) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain.

Edited April 24, 2021 by joepramudio
Asked by admin for edit.

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Halo, Sebelum saya respon Character Story kamu, dimohon untuk jawab pertanyaan dibawah ini dengan jujur:

1. Berapa level karakter kamu saat ini?
2. Apakah UCP kamu sudah sinkron/sesuai ? agar proses Character Story bisa berjalan lancar
3. Apakah kamu mempunyai UCP lebih dari satu?
4. Dipastikan kamu memahami peraturan sebelum membuat Character Story, Apakah sudah membacanya?
5. Bersediakah kamu di banned account permanent jika kamu ketahuan Copy-Paste Character Story?

[joepramudio]

6 hours ago, GulaGula said:

Halo, Sebelum saya respon Character Story kamu, dimohon untuk jawab pertanyaan dibawah ini dengan jujur:

1. Berapa level karakter kamu saat ini?
2. Apakah UCP kamu sudah sinkron/sesuai ? agar proses Character Story bisa berjalan lancar
3. Apakah kamu mempunyai UCP lebih dari satu?
4. Dipastikan kamu memahami peraturan sebelum membuat Character Story, Apakah sudah membacanya?
5. Bersediakah kamu di banned account permanent jika kamu ketahuan Copy-Paste Character Story?

Halo Min!

 

1. Level karakter saya level 3.

2. Sudah main.

3. Tidak min.

4. Sudah min.

5. Bersedia min.

[$SilumanUlar$]



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To @joepramudio

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to PENDING your request.

Reasoning for said denial is listed below:

1. Add a photo on your Character Story for perfect.
2. he remember The verb should probably end in "-s", e.g.: she works here, he does more than his share. Another possibility would be to use a past form, e.g.: She wrote me a letter.
3. was well-educated You should probably replace the hyphen with a space, e.g.: The benefits of a vegan diet have been well documented (it is hyphenated when a noun follows, e.g.: A well-documented finding).
4. mother's last Remove the apostrophe unless you are indicating possession. For example, one writes There were three reasons for his departure, but The boy's house is on fire.
5. a SAPD Before vowel sounds, one writes an, e.g.:, an apple, an MRI.

I wish you the best of luck in the future.

Sincerely,

@GulaGula
JG:RP Staff Team

[joepramudio]

On 4/20/2021 at 2:13 PM, GulaGula said:



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To @joepramudio

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to PENDING your request.

Reasoning for said denial is listed below:

1. Add a photo on your Character Story for perfect.
2. he remember The verb should probably end in "-s", e.g.: she works here, he does more than his share. Another possibility would be to use a past form, e.g.: She wrote me a letter.
3. was well-educated You should probably replace the hyphen with a space, e.g.: The benefits of a vegan diet have been well documented (it is hyphenated when a noun follows, e.g.: A well-documented finding).
4. mother's last Remove the apostrophe unless you are indicating possession. For example, one writes There were three reasons for his departure, but The boy's house is on fire.
5. a SAPD Before vowel sounds, one writes an, e.g.:, an apple, an MRI.

I wish you the best of luck in the future.

Sincerely,

@GulaGula
JG:RP Staff Team

 

Okay, this is the revision of my character story.

However, I think number 4 is unnecessary as the context in that sentence is to indicate a possession (last words; intangible object) of Alfredo's mother.

And please help me out, some how the imgur / image adding isn't working here, is there anyway to send the photo of my CS?

 

Florentino Alfredo Williams, born 1990, was a kid growing up in Sicily, Italy from a wealthy family of which his father, half-American Donald Williams was a respected consigliere of the Sicilian Mafia. He was well educated, graduated as a bachelor of psychology from the University of Italy intending to be a clinical psychologist for Italian war veterans. Not long after his graduation, his father was murdered by a local rival gangster who wanted a bargaining power towards the Sicilian Mafia boss, leaving Alfredo’s mother to commit suicide not long after. Before doing so, she left a note for her son, saying that “Find Don’s little Ty, as you are his little kin, at the land of opportunities.” Angered by his parents’ death, Alfredo assassinated the rival gangster during a theatre show and went on the run from his enforcers.

 

Not long after hiding, Alfredo found himself in the harbour docks of Italy, sneaking himself and his carried things to the ship heading for the City of Los Santos, San Andreas. As he remembers his mother’s last words, he then committed himself to solve the mystery of this “lost kin” of his. Arriving in Los Santos, he then explores his new life; adapting to the American culture and language, seeking out jobs and shelter to survive. He started out fishing, doing truck jobs, and helping out mutual colleagues of his father to for money in return.

 

Alfredo was shocked to find out that the “lost kin” his mother meant was Tyrone Williams, an SAPD Detective from a word-to-word information by his friend who is deep undercover as an intel for the police department. Alfredo sets out to meet with Tyrone, and hopes to develop a life together in Los Santos, and figure out how could he be his brother in the first place.

 

[$SilumanUlar$]

Fix:

1. Use another ways to put your photo on your Character Story. https://postimages.org/id/
2. Don't forget to give two space every at the beginning of each paragraf.

[joepramudio]

3 hours ago, GulaGula said:

Fix:

1. Use another ways to put your photo on your Character Story. https://postimages.org/id/
2. Don't forget to give two space every at the beginning of each paragraf.

 

 

  Florentino Alfredo Williams, born 1990, was a kid growing up in Sicily, Italy from a wealthy family of which his father, half-American Donald Williams was a respected consigliere of the Sicilian Mafia. He was well educated, graduated as a bachelor of psychology from the University of Italy intending to be a clinical psychologist for Italian war veterans. Not long after his graduation, his father was murdered by a local rival gangster who wanted a bargaining power towards the Sicilian Mafia boss, leaving Alfredo’s mother to commit suicide not long after. Before doing so, she left a note for her son, saying that “Find Don’s little Ty, as you are his little kin, at the land of opportunities.” Angered by his parents’ death, Alfredo assassinated the rival gangster during a theatre show and went on the run from his enforcers.

 

  Not long after hiding, Alfredo found himself in the harbour docks of Italy, sneaking himself and his carried things to the ship heading for the City of Los Santos, San Andreas. As he remembers his mother’s last words, he then committed himself to solve the mystery of this “lost kin” of his. Arriving in Los Santos, he then explores his new life; adapting to the American culture and language, seeking out jobs and shelter to survive. He started out fishing, doing truck jobs, and helping out mutual colleagues of his father to for money in return.

 

  Alfredo was shocked to find out that the “lost kin” his mother meant was Tyrone Williams, an SAPD Detective from a word-to-word information by his friend who is deep undercover as an intel for the police department. Alfredo sets out to meet with Tyrone, and hopes to develop a life together in Los Santos, and figure out how could he be his brother in the first place.

 

CS Photo:

https://postimg.cc/9wDw6tcc

[$SilumanUlar$]

20 hours ago, joepramudio said:

 

 

  Florentino Alfredo Williams, born 1990, was a kid growing up in Sicily, Italy from a wealthy family of which his father, half-American Donald Williams was a respected consigliere of the Sicilian Mafia. He was well educated, graduated as a bachelor of psychology from the University of Italy intending to be a clinical psychologist for Italian war veterans. Not long after his graduation, his father was murdered by a local rival gangster who wanted a bargaining power towards the Sicilian Mafia boss, leaving Alfredo’s mother to commit suicide not long after. Before doing so, she left a note for her son, saying that “Find Don’s little Ty, as you are his little kin, at the land of opportunities.” Angered by his parents’ death, Alfredo assassinated the rival gangster during a theatre show and went on the run from his enforcers.

 

  Not long after hiding, Alfredo found himself in the harbour docks of Italy, sneaking himself and his carried things to the ship heading for the City of Los Santos, San Andreas. As he remembers his mother’s last words, he then committed himself to solve the mystery of this “lost kin” of his. Arriving in Los Santos, he then explores his new life; adapting to the American culture and language, seeking out jobs and shelter to survive. He started out fishing, doing truck jobs, and helping out mutual colleagues of his father to for money in return.

 

  Alfredo was shocked to find out that the “lost kin” his mother meant was Tyrone Williams, an SAPD Detective from a word-to-word information by his friend who is deep undercover as an intel for the police department. Alfredo sets out to meet with Tyrone, and hopes to develop a life together in Los Santos, and figure out how could he be his brother in the first place.

 

CS Photo:

https://postimg.cc/9wDw6tcc

Update your fixed Character Story and photo to main post.

[joepramudio]

5 hours ago, GulaGula said:

Update your fixed Character Story and photo to main post.

 

Done.

[$SilumanUlar$]

13 hours ago, joepramudio said:

 

Done.

Put your photo on top of Character Story, look another Character Story for example if you dont understanding.

[joepramudio]

8 hours ago, GulaGula said:

Put your photo on top of Character Story, look another Character Story for example if you dont understanding.

 

Sorry min, the image uploading is still not working for me even using postimages, is there any alternative?

[$SilumanUlar$]

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To @joepramudio

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to APPROVE your request. Please read the following guide to activate your link your store to your In-Game account:

 

Sincerely,

@GulaGula
JG:RP Staff Team.