DreKanzAhmad Posted October 4, 2020 Posted October 4, 2020 (edited) Takeheshi_Keisuke Takeheshi Keisuke was born on the 14th of June 1996 in Japan. He lived in a town nearby the Akagi mountain in Gunma prefecture, Japan. He is the second child in his family with an older brother that is two years older than him. After his older brother got his driving license at the age of 18, his older brother bought a 1985 RX-7 FC3S. He could afford it easily because his family was rich. When Keisuke was 17 years old, his older brother was accepted as a medical student in a university in Japan. Since his older brother got his RX-7, they both always go to the mountain pass of Akagi mountain, every time his older brother had free time. His older brother race with various groups and teams with his RX-7, with Keisuke watching on the passenger seat. His older brother was becoming better and better as two years passed, and finally, Keisuke got to get his driving license after reaching 18 years old of age. His older brother inspired him to be a racer in Akagi, and because of that, he bought an RX-7 FD3S for him to race and train together with his brother in Akagi mountain pass. Unlike his older brother, Keisuke didn't go to any university at the age of 18. Instead, he stayed unemployed for two years to perfect his driving and racing skills. Keisuke and his older brother went to other mountains in Japan to meet and race with other racers on different roads, including Mikuni mountain pass. Mikuni mountain pass was the place Keisuke met with a group called Unknown Family Racers. Unknown Family Racers was very professional and was a strong opponent for Keisuke and his brother. Despite their greatness, Uknown Family Racers was very welcoming and friendly to racers like Keisuke and his brother, especially the leader, Akimura Fukushima. In Mikuni mountain pass, Keisuke also met racers from across the globe, like from the USA. There was a professional driver from the USA that race with Keisuke and Akimura, called Tony Sean. Tony Sean caught the attention of Akimura and Keisuke because Tony's driving skills could rival Akimura's and Keisuke's Driving skills. They raced and shared driving techniques among them as good friends in Mikuni mountain pass. Because Tony wasn't planning to stay in Japan, Tony finally needed to go back to his hometown in San Francisco in 2016. As he was already 20 years old, Keisuke decided to go to a university in Japan. He still went to Mikuni mountain pass to train and hang out with Akimura until two years later Akimura moved to the USA. Keisuke finished his study at the university two years later and decided to move to the USA to create a new career. Questions Tujuan membuat character story: Memperkental roleplay family, dan agar bisa masuk saat nanti familynya Official. Account UCP yang saya miliki: Dresamp Account Forum yang saya miliki:Dre Kanz AhmadDreKanzAhmad Berapa lama saya sudah main di JGRP: 2 tahun lebih Saya biasa main JGRP di: Hanya di rumah Saya DreKanzAhmad selaku pemilik account UCP Dresamp bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Takeheshi_Keisuke) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain. Edited October 9, 2020 by DreKanzAhmad 'skilled driver' to 'professional driver'. 'raced with' to 'race with'
$FOREIGNACIL$ Posted October 4, 2020 Posted October 4, 2020 These grammar are sucks, could you fix it?
DreKanzAhmad Posted October 5, 2020 Author Posted October 5, 2020 (edited) I edited my post. Could you give me an example of my grammar mistake, if there are still any? I will do my best to fix it. Edited October 5, 2020 by DreKanzAhmad
$FOREIGNACIL$ Posted October 6, 2020 Posted October 6, 2020 You cand find it if you didn't using translate, bro.
DreKanzAhmad Posted October 7, 2020 Author Posted October 7, 2020 My sincerest apologies, @Vanice I still can't find my grammar mistake without any clue. I didn't use google translate in the process of making this post, as google translate is not reliable for long sentences and paragraphs and will ruin the grammar. And after you posted the reply saying that my grammar sucks, I have double-checked my story using Grammarly and fixed some mistakes. If you think there are still any grammar mistakes, I beg you to point out what they are, so that I can fix them. For example, after 'didn't' instead of 'using' it should be "use" or maybe before "sucks" there shouldn't be an "are" because "suck" is a verb. It would be a great help if you could point out what my mistakes are, or at least give me a clue. Thank you.
$FOREIGNACIL$ Posted October 9, 2020 Posted October 9, 2020 On 10/4/2020 at 6:08 PM, DreKanzAhmad said: skilled driver "Professional driver" On 10/4/2020 at 6:08 PM, DreKanzAhmad said: raced with "Race with"
DreKanzAhmad Posted October 9, 2020 Author Posted October 9, 2020 Edited. I changed 'skilled driver' to 'professional driver' and 'raced with' to 'race with', as you advised.
$FOREIGNACIL$ Posted October 9, 2020 Posted October 9, 2020 To @NamaForumI am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to APPROVE your request. Please read the following guide to activate your link your store to your In-Game account: Sincerely,@NamaStaffJG:RP Staff Team.
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