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Character: Vanessa Evangeline

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          Vanessa Evangeline lahir di Washington D.C , November 1990. Ia lahir dari pasangan  Roberts Urington dan  Audriana Houston. Vanessa biasa dipanggil oleh orang-orang sekitar  lingkungannya dengan nama Nesa. Ayah Vanessa bekerja sebagai petani di Washington D.C, sedangkan ibunya adalah seorang ibu rumah tangga. Ketika Vanessa sekolah dasar, Vanessa sering mendapatkan apreasi dari sekoalah. Karena sering mendapatkan juara di kelas nya maupun di luar sekolah. Orang tua Vanessa sangat senang karena Vanessa sering mendapatkan piagam dari sekolah maupun luar sekolah. Selain itu Vanessa dikenal dengan kepintarannya dan kebaikannya.

 

          Setelah bertahun tahun, akhirnya Vanessa berhasil menyelesaikan SMP di Washington D.C. Lalu Vanessa melanjutkan ke SMA. Pada umur ke-18 tahun Vanessa mendapatkan sebuah piagam dan mendapatkan sebuah beasiswa sekolahnya. Karena Vanessa mendapatkan juara 1 kejuaraan matematika. Orang tua Vanessa sangat senang karena anak mereka mendapatkan beasiswa dan sebuah piagam dari sekolahnya. Pada usia ke-20 tahun, Vanessa berhasil menyelesaikan SMA di Washington D.C. Dia mendapatkan beasiswa untuk melanjutkan studinya di Los Santos. Orang tua Vanessa sangat senang karena Vanessa adalah salah satu dari banyaknya siswa yang bisa pergi ke Los Santos Universtiy. Salah satu universty terbaik di U.S.A pada masa itu. Pada saat di Los Santos Vanessa bertemu dengan seorang perempuan yang berasal dari New York yaitu bernama Mutia Ayra. Vanessa dan Mutia tinggal di sebuah apartement tebaik di Los Santos saat itu.

 

          Pada saat di perguruan tinggi, ia tidak sebaik di sekolah sebelumnya. Ia sering terlambat, tidak pernah mengerjakan pekerjaan rumah dan suka bolos sekolah. Akhirnya Vanessa dikeluarkan dari sekolahnya karena sifat malasnya itu. Karena kemalasannya, maka dari pihak sekolah memutuskan harus mengeluarkan Vanessa. Setelah keluar dari Universty Los Satos, Vanessa terpaksa mencari pekerjaan untuk memunuhi kebutuhan selama di Los Santos. Tidak berjelang lama akhirnya Vanessa memutuskan untuk menjadi mechanic di Los Santos. Vanessa sangat senang karena dia bisa bekerja dan mencari sebuah teman juga menambah wawasan lebih dalam di locomotif. Setelah bekerja mechanic, Vanessa lalu memilih menjadi seorang trucker karena gaji nya lebih besar dan penghasilan lebih tinggi. Tetapi pekerjaan trucker mempunyai resiko yang sangat besar mulai dari mengantar barang di jalan yang sempit sampai kecelakaan kerja. Tapi Vanessa hanya ingin mencapai tujuannya  yaitu merubah keadaan  keluarganya menjadi lebih baik lagi. Pada akhirnya Vanessa sudah berumur 20 tahun. Menjadi supir truck Vanessa bisa merubah keadaan dan bisa membeli rumah untuk keluarganya sendiri. 

 

 

Saya $Scorpion$ selaku pemilik account UCP Wayay12 bersedia jika Character saya yang disebut di atas (Vanessa Evangeline) dibanned permanent jika character story yang saya buat di atas berupa plagiat dari story milik orang lain.

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To Mr/Ms Vanessa Evangeline [Wayay123],

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision toPENDING your request.

Reasoning for said denial is listed below:
  1. Perbaiki EYD kamu.
  2. Banyak kata kata yang Typo/salah.
I wish you the best of luck in the future.

Sincerely,

HoA Dimdim,
Jogjagamers Roleplay Administrative Team.



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8 hours ago, dimdim said:
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To Mr/Ms Vanessa Evangeline [Wayay123],

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision toPENDING your request.

Reasoning for said denial is listed below:
  1. Perbaiki EYD kamu.
  2. Banyak kata kata yang Typo/salah.
I wish you the best of luck in the future.

Sincerely,

HoA Dimdim,
Jogjagamers Roleplay Administrative Team.



Tolong min di check yang salah di mana nya, Saya sudah coba Edit

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To Mr/Ms Vanessa Evangeline [Wayay123],

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to PENDING your request.

Reasoning for said denial is listed below:
  1. Perbaiki EYD kamu. (titik, koma, dan penggunaan huruf kapital)
  2. Banyak kata kata yang Typo/salah.
I wish you the best of luck in the future.

Sincerely,

HoA Dimdim,
Jogjagamers Roleplay Administrative Team.

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1 hour ago, dimdim said:
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To Mr/Ms Vanessa Evangeline [Wayay123],

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to PENDING your request.

Reasoning for said denial is listed below:
  1. Perbaiki EYD kamu. (titik, koma, dan penggunaan huruf kapital)
  2. Banyak kata kata yang Typo/salah.
I wish you the best of luck in the future.

Sincerely,

HoA Dimdim,
Jogjagamers Roleplay Administrative Team.

Editer min saya rubah dari awal, Apakah ada yang salah?,

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To Mr/Ms Vanessa Evangeline [Wayay123],

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to PENDING your request.

Reasoning for said denial is listed below:
  1. Perbaiki EYD kamu.
  2. Banyak kata kata yang Typo/salah.
I wish you the best of luck in the future.

Sincerely,

HoA Dimdim,
Jogjagamers Roleplay Administrative Team.

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14 hours ago, dimdim said:
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To Mr/Ms Vanessa Evangeline [Wayay123],

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to PENDING your request.

Reasoning for said denial is listed below:
  1. Perbaiki EYD kamu.
  2. Banyak kata kata yang Typo/salah.
I wish you the best of luck in the future.

Sincerely,

HoA Dimdim,
Jogjagamers Roleplay Administrative Team.

iya om dimdim salah nya di bagian mana, Itu EYD sudah saya rubah masih salah?

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To Mr/Ms Vanessa Evangeline [Wayay123],

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to PENDING your request.

Reasoning for said denial is listed below:
  1. Perbaiki EYD kamu.
  2. Banyak kata kata yang Typo/salah.
I wish you the best of luck in the future.

Sincerely,

HoA Dimdim,
Jogjagamers Roleplay Administrative Team.

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On 12/22/2018 at 2:29 PM, dimdim said:
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To Mr/Ms Vanessa Evangeline [Wayay123],

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to PENDING your request.

Reasoning for said denial is listed below:
  1. Perbaiki EYD kamu.
  2. Banyak kata kata yang Typo/salah.
I wish you the best of luck in the future.

Sincerely,

HoA Dimdim,
Jogjagamers Roleplay Administrative Team.
di Check lagi, sudah saya rubah text.

 

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To Mr/Ms Vanessa Evangeline [Wayay123],

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to PENDING your request.

Reasoning for said denial is listed below:
  1. Perbaiki EYD kamu.
  2. Banyak kata kata yang Typo/salah.
I wish you the best of luck in the future.

Sincerely,

HoA Dimdim,
Jogjagamers Roleplay Administrative Team.

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20 minutes ago, dimdim said:

 

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To Mr/Ms Vanessa Evangeline [Wayay123],

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to PENDING your request.

Reasoning for said denial is listed below:
  1. Perbaiki EYD kamu.
  2. Banyak kata kata yang Typo/salah.
I wish you the best of luck in the future.

Sincerely,

HoA Dimdim,
Jogjagamers Roleplay Administrative Team.

saya udah coba rubah, Coba di check lagi, kalau bisa bang dimdim kasih tau salah dimana ya, terimakasih.

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To Mr/Ms Vanessa Evangeline [Wayay123],

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to PENDING your request.

Reasoning for said denial is listed below:
  1. Perbaiki EYD kamu.
  2. Banyak kata kata yang Typo/salah.
  3. Paragraf jadi hancur coba jadikan minimal 3 paragraf
I wish you the best of luck in the future.

Sincerely,

HoA Dimdim,
Jogjagamers Roleplay Administrative Team.

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To Mr/Ms Vanessa Evangeline [Wayay123],

I am writing to you in regards of your recently submitted character story, we have reviewed your character story and, as a result, have come to the decision to PENDING your request.

Reasoning for said denial is listed below:
  1. Perbaiki EYD kamu. (Setelah titik/koma berikan spasi | Setelah titik berikan kapital | Kapital digunakan saat)
  2. Banyak kata kata yang Typo/salah.
  3. Dibaca ulang, terus koreksi yang salah. (Ia lahir dari seorang Roberts Urington (Ayah) dan Geline Houston (IBU))

Catatan: Kalau belum dibaca, dan sudah bilang diedit, jangan harap saya koreksi.

 

I wish you the best of luck in the future.

Sincerely,

HoA Dimdim,
Jogjagamers Roleplay Administrative Team.

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